Editing Practice

Which is the correctly written sentence?

• The unique event, know as Skyscraper Games, was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• Known as Skyscraper Games. It was a unique event and the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• The unique event, know as Skyscraper Games. It was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• Known as Skyscraper Games, a unique event that was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

Which is the most effective combination of sentences?

• Natalia, who was in awe of O'Keeffe's paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, was a teenager most inspired by the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico.

• Natalia was in awe of O'Keeffe's paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, but it was the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico that most inspired the teenager.

• Being in awe of O'Keeffe's paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico most inspired the teenager Natalia.

• Because Natalia was in awe of O'Keeffe's paintings of New York and its skyscrapers, the teenager was most inspired by the flowers and landscapes of New Mexico.

What change should be made to this sentence?

Inn 2013 he had obtained permission to manipulate a building's LED lights to display the video game Pong.

• Change he to it.

• Change manipulate to mannipulate.

• Change building's to buildings'.

• Make no change.

What change needs to be made to the following sentence?

The next year, Lee programmed the lights to create a skyscraper-sized version of Tetris, a game that involved rotating oddly-shaped block to make it fit together.

• Change the comma after Tetris to a semicolon.

• Change involves to will involve.

• Changing rotating to rotatting.

• Change it to them.

What change needs to be made to the following sentence?

The Tetris display was 119,600 square feet so big that it could be seen al over Philadelphia.

• Insert a dash after feet.

• Change so big to it was so big.

• Change it to they.

• Change could be seen to had been seen.

What change needs to be made in the second sentence?

The first tower was lit in Hyde Park, a suburb that was then on the north edge of town. It gave light to a 3,000-foot-diameter space, stood 165 feet tall, had a base of 15 feet, and weighed approximatly 5,000 pounds.

• Change It to They.

• Delete the comma after space.

• Change had to has.

• Change approximatly to approximately.

What change needs to be made to the following sentence?

The moon towers, which is what people now call the structures, is no longer a practical source of light.

• Delete the comma after towers.

• Change call to called.

• Change is to are.

• Change practical to practacal.

The second sentence contains an indefinite (unclear) reference What is the best way to revise that sentence?

During the trip, Sarah Thomas had to deal with jellyfish stings, mouth and throat pains, and keeping food down. She wanted to give up at one point, but they encouraged her to keep going.

• Change She to They

• Change but to and

• Change they to crew members

• Change her to another teammate