Editing and Revising Quiz

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

What is a good title for this passage?

• Little Green Men

• The Irish

• St. Patrick's Day

• How Snakes Left Ireland

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

Revise sentence 2.

• St. patrick was a real person lived in Ireland long ago.

• St. Patrick was a real person who lived in Ireland long ago.

• St. Patrick was a real person and he lived in Ireland long ago.

• No change needed.

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

Sentence 4 is a run-on. Revise it. It would best read:

• On St. Patrick's Day people wear green. They even eat green bagels.

• On St. Patrick's Day. People wear green they even eat green bagels.

• On St. Patrick's Day people wear green they even eat. Green bagels.

• On St. Patrick's Day people wear green. On St. Patricks Day they even eat green bagels.

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

Combine sentence 6 and sentence 7. The best combination would be:

• On this special day many towns and cities have parades and the parades have Irish music and dancing.

• On this special day many towns and cities have Irish music and dancing.

• On this special day many towns and cities have parades with Irish music and dancing.

• On this special day many towns and cities have parades Irish music and dancing.

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

Line 8 is not a complete sentence. Revise it. It should read:

• People tell leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold.

• Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold people tell.

• Leprechaun stories about rainbows are told and about pots of gold.

• Leprechaun stories people tell about rainbows and pots of gold.

(1) On March seventeenth many people celebrate st. patrick’s day! (2) St. Patrick was a real person he lived in ireland long ago. (3) Legend tells that he frightened the snakes out of Ireland. (4) On St. Patrick’s Day people wear green they even eat green bagels. (5) Green is my favorite color. (6) On this special day many towns and cities have parades. (7) The parades have Irish music and dancing. (8) Leprechaun stories about rainbows and pots of gold. (9) You don’t have to be irish to enjoy a St. Patrick’s day meal of corned beef and cabbage.

There is a sentence in this paragraph that doesn't belong. The author should leave out:

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 6

(1) Have you ever played with magnets and watched them snap together or push apart? (2) Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air and a magnet can make an object move without even touching it. (3) Magnets come in many shapes. (4) Magnets come in many sizes. (5) Magnets have two poles called a north pole and a south pole and the north pole and south pole attract each other and like poles repel each other

Sentence 2 is a run on sentence. What is the best way to correct it?

• Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air. A magnet can even make an object move without touching it.

• Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air did you know a magnet can make an object move without even touching it?

• Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air, but a magnet can make an object move without even touching it.

• Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air so a magnet can make an object move without even touching it.

(1) Have you ever played with magnets and watched them snap together or push apart? (2) Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air and a magnet can make an object move without even touching it. (3) Magnets come in many shapes. (4) Magnets come in many sizes. (5) Magnets have two poles called a north pole and a south pole and the north pole and south pole attract each other and like poles repel each other

What would be the best way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

• Magnets come in many shapes and magnets come in many sizes.

• Magnets come in many shapes, but they come in many sizes.

• Magnets come in many shapes and sizes.

• Magnets come in many shapes they come in many sizes.

(1) Have you ever played with magnets and watched them snap together or push apart? (2) Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air and a magnet can make an object move without even touching it. (3) Magnets come in many shapes. (4) Magnets come in many sizes. (5) Magnets have two poles called a north pole and a south pole and the north pole and south pole attract each other and like poles repel each other

What is wrong with sentence 5?

• It is a fragment.

• It goes on and on.

• It has no subject and verb.

• It is not long enough.

(1) Have you ever played with magnets and watched them snap together or push apart? (2) Maybe you have even seen a magnet make an object move through the air and a magnet can make an object move without even touching it. (3) Magnets come in many shapes. (4) Magnets come in many sizes. (5) Magnets have two poles called a north pole and a south pole and the north pole and south pole attract each other and like poles repel each other

Which sentence does not belong in this paragraph?

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 6