Benchmark Revising and Editing

From “The House on the Rock”

Which additional detail could BEST follow and support sentence 13?

• Jordan built the house on such a magnificent site.

• One room in the house features 3,064 windows.

• They wanted to come a little closer to the house.

• Jordan charged these early visitors 50 cents each.

From “The House on the Rock”

The word worthy is not the appropriate word to use in sentence 26. Which should replace worthy in this sentence?

(26)And although the items in some exhibits may look old and worthy, most are not.

• beneficial

• entertaining

• valuable

• effective

From “The House on the Rock”

Ainsley's paper ends abruptly. Which sentence can be added after sentence 29 to sum up the information in this paper and bring it to a more effective conclusion?

• They visit to be awed and entertained by the seemingly boundless imagination of one man.

• They are intrigued by the views and the massive rock on which the house was built.

• They usually say in exit surveys that they are simply unable to pick their favorite attraction.

• They enjoy distinguishing between the authentic artifacts and the created ones.

From “My Masterpiece”

Ivy needs to add a sentence to improve the introductory paragraph of her paper. Which sentence can BEST be added after sentence 1?

• When I heard about the class, I knew the instructor would let me copy her painting exactly.

• I'm talking about the kind where an instructor tells you how to make painting step by step.

• My friend Ella said we should spend time together over break, and I told her we should paint.

• When I first tried to paint sunflowers, I was grateful to see I had a bit of natural talent for art.

From “My Masterpiece”

Ivy needs a better transition between the second paragraph (sentences 3-8) and the third paragraph (sentences 9-11). Which phrase can she add to the beginning of sentence 9 to help with this transition?

• In response

• For this reason

• As the class began

• In the same way

From “My Masterpiece”

What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 14 and 15?

• The jagged white streak that I tried to cover with blue paint to my horror remained visible beneath the blue.

• I tried to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, to my horror it remained visible beneath the blue.

• Trying to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, it remained visible to my horror beneath the blue.

• I tried to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, but to my horror it remained visible beneath the blue.

From “My Masterpiece”

Ivy has included a sentence that does not belong in the sixth paragraph (sentence 23-28). Which sentence should she remove from this paragraph?

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

• Sentence 26

From “My Masterpiece”

Ivy needs a better closing sentence for the last paragraph (sentences 33-36). Which sentence should replace sentence 36?

• Every time I see it, I think of all the difficulty I experienced while painting it.

• To this day, I love to wear the T-shirt I had on that day in the painting class.

• As imperfect as it is, that painting makes me feel happy now.

• From there people see it as they pass by on the sidewalk below.

From “A Season of Changes”

Christina has made an error in sentence 2. Select the response that corrects this error.

(2)Delaney, a friend I've known since kindergarten, moved with her parents to-

• oak park, a Suburb of Chicago

• oak Park, a suburb of Chicago

• Oak Park, a suburb of Chicago

• oak park, a suburb of chicago

From "A Season of Changes"

What change should be made in sentence 3?

(3) My dad changed careers and started working longer hours which meant that everyone had to help more at home.

• Change careers to career's

• Insert comma after hours

• Change meant to mint

• Change had to has