4th Revising and Editing

Which sentence should replace sentence 4 to better state the central idea of this paper?

• Tabichi knew this was a great deal of money, and he was thankful for it.

• More teachers who serve their students should be recognized like Tabichi was.

• The Global Teacher Prize was awarded to a man named Peter Tabichi.

• Tabichi was recognized because of the difference he is making in children's lives.

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4.11B

4.11B.i

What is the BEST transition to add to the beginning of sentence 12?

• However

• Therefore

• Overall

• Finally

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4.11B

4.11B.i

Kinsley has not used the BEST choice of words in sentence 2. Which phrase should replace a very big in this sentence?

• one large

• an important

• some huge

• this certain

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4.11C

In the box provided, combine the ideas in sentences 17 and 18 t create one clear and effective sentence.

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4.11C

Chuck wants to improve the introduction to his story by adding another sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 2-4). Which sentence could BEST be added after sentence 3?

• It was super early, but this was the time we had to be at the bus stop to get to school on time.

• Baxter almost always wore a gray hoodie and jeans, no matter what season of the year it happened to be.

• My dad is a morning person too, and he always wakes me up with a loud and annoying song.

• He didn't care that the sun had just come up and that the birds were still singing their daybreak tunes.

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4.11B

4.11B.i

Read the third paragraph (sentences 5-10) again. Which sentence in this paragraph repeats information and should be removed?

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 6

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 10

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4.11B

4.11B.ii

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 13?

• Baxted had a lot to say, so most mornings I just listened and giggled.

• Baxted had a lot to say but most mornings just listened and giggling.

• Baxter most mornings had a lot to say, or I just listened and giggled.

• Baxter had a lot to say listen to most mornings, so I just had a giggle.

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CCSS.L.3.1H

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What is the BEST way to revise sentence 19 to avoid repeating an idea?

• He started describing, and I tried to act interested about his new house.

• He started describing his new house, and I tried to act interested.

• He started describing his new house, and I tried to act interested to the telling about it.

• He started describing his new house and acting interested to tell about it.

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4.11C

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 6?

• Change It's to Its

• Change and has to it has

• Change star to stars

• No change is needed.

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4.11D

What is the correct way to write sentence 4?

• They established the Republic of Texas. And proudly created their own flag.

• They established and proudly created their own flag. For the Republic of Texas.

• They established and proudly created for the Republic of Texas. Their own flag.

• They established the Republic of Texas proudly created their own flag.

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