DOL 2/28/24 4.11C Class 1

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 5?

• Like the end of the school day, we practiced getting on and off.

• The end of the school day we practiced getting on and off.

• We practiced getting on and off like it was the end of the school day.

• No revision should be made in this sentence.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• Getting on or off the bus before your turn can be very dangerous and some kids have tried to do it.

• Some kids tried to get on or off before it was their turn which is dangerous because people can get pushed or hurt.

• Some kids tried to get on or off the bus before their turn which is dangerous in different ways if you try it.

• Getting on or off the bus before your turn can be dangerous, so kids tried to do it.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 10?

• Next, we learned only that a bus driver sees some of the area outside of the bus around.

• Next, we learned where a bus driver only sees some of the area around the outside of the bus.

• Next, we learned that a bus driver only sees some of the area around the outside of the bus.

• No revision should be made in this sentence.

Lilian would like to replace sentence 13 with a sentence that will improve the clarity of her paragraph. Which sentence should she use?

• The bus driver must be trained to handle emergency situations.

• Some buses have additional mirrors or cameras.

• This area around the bus is called the danger zone.

• Students are taught to walk in front of the bus when crossing.

What is the best way to combine the ideas in sentences 17 and 18 to create one clear and effective sentence?

• We need to practice the rules by ourselves, or we'll all have a safe and fun ride to school every day.

  
  

• We need to practice the rules by ourselves, so we'll all have a safe and fun ride to school every day.

  
  

• We need to practice the rules by ourselves, however, we'll all have a safe and fun ride to school every day.

  
  

• We need to practice the rules by ourselves, nor we'll all have a safe and fun ride to school every day.