DOL 05.09 - The Puppy Bowl

Yasmin read the text  “The Puppy Bowl” and developed a draft using the instructions above. Read the following essay written by Yasmin and look for the revisions and changes she needs to make. Then answer the questions that follow.

(1) The Puppy Bowl positively impacts animals' lives by providing them with exposure, care, and opportunities for adoption. (2) This event, which began in 2005, offers shelter animals a platform to showcase their charm while also raising awareness about adoption. (3) The Puppy Bowl started in New York City, a busy and diverse place. 

(4) For starters, the Puppy Bowl ensures the well-being and care of the participating animals throughout the entire process. (5) The text states, “The puppies are filmed for only 20 minutes at a time to make sure that they stay safe and enjoy themselves.”(6) This shows the Puppy Bowl's dedication to made a positive experience for its animal participants. 

(7) Furthermore, the Puppy Bowl serves as a platform to help promote the adoption of pets. (8) The text states, “And by the end of the Puppy Bowl each year, all of them are adopted.” (9) The halftime show is even cuter. (10) This demonstrates the Puppy Bowl's significant role in facilitating pet adoptions and finding loving homes for all participating animals.

(11) In summary, the Puppy Bowl is a positive event for shelter animals and encourages adoption. (12) Since its start it has bring joy to millions while also making a real difference in the lives of many animals.

Using the instructions in the box, answer the following questions to help Yasmin develop her first draft.

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Yasmin has included an extraneous sentence in the text. Which sentence should be deleted from the text?

• Sentence 1

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

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What change should be made in sentence 6?

• Change shows to showed

• Change made to make

• Change animal to animals

• No change is needed.

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Yasmin has included an extraneous sentence in the text. Which sentence should be deleted from the text?

• Sentence 6

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

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What change should be made in sentence 12?

• Change start to started

• Change has to had

• Change bring to brought

• No change is needed.

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