Warmup - Revising and editing

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Find the error in the sentence: "Your cousin Juan will be there, and you used to play basketball for hours with them."

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Change them to him.

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What change should be made in the following sentence? She sighed as her father, who was walking toward some older relatives was greeted warmly with big hugs.

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Add a comma after relatives.

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What change should be made in the following sentence? At last Marta captured a glimpse of Juan, who was wearing his terra vista middle school basketball jersey.

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Capitalize Terra Vista Middle School

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What is the correct way to write the following sentence (without changing its meaning)?
After becoming registered voters, may people have exercised their right to vote, voted in every election.
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1. After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election.
2. Many people have exercised their right to vote. Voted in every election after becoming registered voters.
3. After becoming registered voters. Many people have exercised their right to vote in every election.
4. Many people have exercised their right to vote, voted in every election, becoming registered voters.

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After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election.

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What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence? Young voters bare responsibility to help select their government officials.

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Change bare to bear.

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Which sentence should replace the following to effectively state the controlling idea? Science and a lot of other things are needed to design a fun and working roller coaster. Options: Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.; Quite a bit of knowledge is needed to figure out how the best roller coasters work.; Roller coasters have to be fun, so the scientists who design and build them must know something about amusement parks.; Hard work, science, and having lots of other skills are needed to design popular roller coasters.

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Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

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Which word should replace lower in the sentence: Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars lower these slopes.

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descend

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Which revision most improves this sentence? Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design because that is their objective. Options: Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design. Designers have an objective to set new records that they aim for when designing each new roller coaster. Designers set new records to aim for them with each new roller-coaster design. Designers aim to set new records because that is their objective with each new roller-coaster design.

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Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

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What change should be made in the sentence: "You are going to have a magnificent time, " replies her father?

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Change replies to replied.

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What is the correct way to write the following sentence? He saw Marta, and hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.

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He saw Marta and hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.