Revising: A Picnic in the Park

1. Where is the best place to add this sentence:

2. “My dad arranged our red picnic blanket while we emptied the picnic basket."

• • After sentence 3

• • Before sentence 4

• • After sentence 4

• • After sentence 5

1. Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 7?

• • The food was the best we had all month.

• • We all felt relaxed and satisfied after eating.

• • Everyone took a nap right after lunch.

• • My mom always packs the tastiest treats for our picnics.

1. What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 9 and 10?

• • My little brother tried to join in, while he kept throwing the ball in the wrong direction.

• • My little brother tried to join in, while he kept throwing it in the wrong direction.

• • My little brother tried to join, but he kept throwing it in the wrong direction.

• • While my little brother tried to join, he kept throwing it in the wrong direction.

1. In the box provided, combine the ideas in sentences 13 and 14 to create a clear and effective sentence.
   

Which sentence could you add to the end of the passage to have a better conclusion?

• I ended up getting a little sunburn that day.

• Having a picnic with my family in the park is one of my favorite ways to spend the day.

• I love picnics, but I wish we had gone to an amusement park instead.

• I'm so glad it didn't rain.