The Dam- Revising

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 1?

• Marianna burst into the house and slammed the door.

• Marianna burst into the house, and, slammed the door.

• Marianna burst into the house. And slammed the door.

• Marianna burst into. The house, and slammed the door.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Emma would like to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentence 1-14): "Where have you been all evening?" Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• At the beginning of the paragraph

• After sentence 4

• After sentence 5

• After sentence 7

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CCSS.RI.2.5

CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.4.5

Emma has not used the most effective transition at the beginning of sentence 14. Emma should change When to -

• However

• Therefore

• Then

• Because

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CCSS.RI.2.3

CCSS.RI.2.5

CCSS.RI.3.3

CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RI.4.5

What is the correct way to write sentences 16 and 17?

• She was careful enough to keep herself from falling into the water, but she agreed not to visit the dam anymore.

• She was careful enough to keep herself.. From falling into the water, but she agreed not to visit the dam anymore.

• She was careful enough to keep herself from falling into the water but, she agreed not to visit the dam anymore.

• Sentences 16 and 17 are correct in the paper.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C

Emma wants to further develop the central idea of this paper by adding a detail after sentence 25. Which of these sentences could BEST follow and support sentence 25?

• My mom told me not to go to the dam again.

• Besides, what were the odds that something bad would happen?

• Besides, no one will ever find out.

• Lewis was telling her about the dinner he had last night.

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CCSS.RI.2.1

CCSS.RI.3.2

CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RL.3.1

CCSS.RL.3.2

Emma wants to add a conclusion to her paper. Which of the following could BEST follow sentence 27 and close this paper?

• Let's go Lewis.

• But, it would be so exciting to go to the dam again.

• My mom will ground me if I go to the dam again with Lewis.

• “A car might hit me while I’m crossing the street,” she thought.

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CCSS.RL.2.10

CCSS.RL.3.10

CCSS.RL.3.6

CCSS.RL.4.10

CCSS.RL.4.6