Revising Practice, Chapman

Highlight sentence 1.

Sacha wants to use FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE to introduce the SETTING.

What is the most effective way for her to rewrite sentence 1?

• Everyone looked toward the door as the futuristic instructor bolted into the classroom.

• Everyone looked toward the door as the shiny metal instructor teetered into the classroom.

• The enthusiastic students looked up eagerly as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.

• The students gazed up like obedient pets as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.

Highlight sentences 12 and 13.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13 to make the meaning clearer?

• We all laughed and realized he had to be joking. (Don't choose this one. It needs a comma.)

• We all laughed, we knew he was joking. (Don't choose this one. It needs a period.)

• We all laughed because we thought he had to be joking. (This one looks perfect to me.)

• We laughed, of course he was joking. (Don't choose this one. It needs a period.

Tags

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

Highlight sentences 16 & 17.

What sentence should be added after sentence 17 to support sentence 16

and add to readers' understanding of the futuristic setting.

• Using water could ruin the food.

• No one touches dirt or steps outside to grow our food.

• Most labs are located inside large factories outside the main city.

• Restaurants purchase their vegetables from labs.

Highlight sentence 20.

Sacha wants to convey the narrator's feelings about the first step of the experiment.

Which of the following sentences would be most effective following sentence 20?

• I was shocked to find I was touching real dirt.

• The dirt was a dark, grainy substance.

• I knew what dirt was but had never seen it before.

• Some of the dirt spilled on my desk, and I brushed it off.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

Highlight sentence 22.

What transition word or phrase could Sacha add to the beginning of sentence 22

to help the reader follow the narrator's actions?

• Next,

  (Is the author describing the STEPS to do something?)

• Therefore,

  (Is the next sentence a RESULT of the 1st?)

• Finally,

  (Is the next sentence the end of a process?)

• In addition,

  (Is the author ADDING something?)

Tags

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.7.10

CCSS.RL.8.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Highlight sentence 24-27.

One of them should be deleted. We do NOT need it. Which one?

Hint: It's the one that is NOT about growing food.

• Delete sentence 24

• Delete sentence 25

• Delete sentence 26

• Delete sentence 27

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5