Revise and Edit

Which sentence should replace sentence 3 to create a more effective introduction to this paper?

• Fortunately, we live close to the coast and are able to make frequent trips to the beach.

• Additionally, my favorite family activity is movie night, especially when the movie is about animals.

• Truthfully, I have a hard time deciding what to bring with me, and I typically pack too much.

• Admittedly, I have at times been less than thrilled to tag along on these wild excursions.

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CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RL.4.10

CCSS.RL.4.6

CCSS.RL.5.10

CCSS.RL.5.6

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 14?

• After we got off the ferry and into a rental car, wildlife is what my mother began looking for and a good place to turn off the road.

• After we got off the ferry and into a rental car, my mother began looking for a good place to turn off the road to look for wildlife.

• After we got off the ferry to begin looking for wildlife, we were into a rental car, and my mother was looking for a good place to turn off.

• After we got off the ferry and into a rental car and began looking for wildlife, my mother began looking for a good place.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Akim needs a better transition between the fifth paragraph (sentences 16–20) and the sixth paragraph (sentences 21–26). Which sentence should replace sentence 21 to improve this transition?

• We quickly pulled into a parking area above a river and exited the car.

• My father stopped the car, and he announced that he was getting hungry.

• As the car came to a stop, I wondered if we would ever get to the lodge.

• Before long we got to a place, and then Dad decided to stop the car.

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RL.3.3

CCSS.RL.4.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

Akim wants to combine the ideas in sentences 30 and 31. In the box provided, write a new sentence that combines these ideas in a clear and effective way.

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CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RL.4.10

CCSS.RL.4.6

CCSS.RL.5.10

CCSS.RL.5.6

Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 7 to support the ideas presented in the second paragraph (sentences 6–8)?

• My dad is an auto mechanic at a large car dealership, so he often has to work on the weekends.

• My sister is a few years older than me, and she has always done quite well in school.

• My mom plans meals months in advance, and my sister turns in projects before they are due.

• My parents enjoy traveling around the state and learning more about history.

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CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RI.5.2

CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RL.5.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

Niko has included a sentence that does not belong in the fourth paragraph (sentences 15–19). Which sentence should he remove from this paragraph?

• Sentence 15

• Sentence 17

• Sentence 18

• Sentence 19

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CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.3

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.6.5

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 23?

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps that I hastily glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and there were paper scraps that I hastily and quickly glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, hastily and quickly gluing together what I pulled out, which was brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out and removing brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps for hastily gluing together.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

The word unusual is not the MOST appropriate word to use in sentence 25. Select the ONE correct word that should replace unusual in this sentence. When I entered the cafeteria and saw everyone else’s models on display, I felt even more ______ about mine.

• indifferent

• suspicious

• irritated

• embarrassed

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CCSS.L.1.1F

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.K.5B

Niko forgot to include this sentence in the last paragraph (sentences 29-33). "I have the satisfaction of knowing that I won't have to scramble at the last minute." Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 29

• After sentence 30

• After sentence 32

• After sentence 33

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CCSS.RI.6.10

CCSS.RI.7.10

CCSS.RL.3.10

CCSS.RL.4.10

CCSS.RL.5.10

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• Change Headlines to headlines

• Change allow to allows

• Insert a comma after readers

• Change quickly to quick

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CCSS.L.2.2C