ELA Revising Practice

1. Roberto wants to increase the intensity created in his introduction. Which of the following would be the BEST way to rewrite sentence 5 to accomplish this goal?

• The blood that the patient is losing needs to be replaced as soon as possible.

• The patient is losing a massive amount of blood and is in desperate need of a transfusion.

• The anxious doctor realizes that a blood transfusion is needed when he notices the blood loss.

• You may know someone who has needed a blood transfusion in the past.

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2. What is the most effective way to revise sentence 11?

• Also, whenever there is a devastating event, the need for blood can become even more critical, this happened with the terrorist attacks on September 11, 2001.

• Also, there is a devastating event and the need for blood can become even more critical whenever there are terrorist attacks, such as on September 11, 2001.

• Also, whenever there is a devastating event, the need for blood can become even more critical than the terrorist attacks on September 11, 2001.

• Also, whenever there is a devastating event, such as the terrorist attacks on September 11, 2001, the need for blood can become even more critical.

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3. Roberto would like to add a transition to connect the paragraphs 2 and 3 more effectively. Which transition should be added to the beginning of sentence 12?

• Fortunately,

• As an example,

• On the contrary,

• In fact,

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4. Roberto would like to combine the ideas in sentences 14 and 15. Which is the best way to combine these sentences?

• Although the process requires less than an hour of the donor’s time, most people say that it is almost painless.

• The process usually requires less than an hour of the donor’s time, yet most people say that it is almost painless.

• The process usually requires less than an hour of the donor’s time, and most people say that it is almost painless.

• Most people say the process that usually requires less than an hour of the donor’s time is almost painless.

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5. The meaning of sentence 21 can be improved by changing it to —

• them

• some

• your arm

• your blood

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6. The writer would like to strengthen the ideas in paragraph 4 (sentences 20-25) by adding additional details. He wants to add the following sentence:

You may feel a little woozy, but after some juice and cookies, you’ll probably feel fine.

The statement above can be inserted after what sentence?

• Sentence 21

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

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