EOC II Revising and Editing

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

(2) Three hundred miles isn’t hardly that far, so you would probably expect the island to be home to the same sorts of plants and animals found on the mainland.

• Change hardly to really

• Delete so

• Insert a comma after plants

• No change should be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.4.1C

How should sentence 5 be changed?

(5) How is it possible that such a unique island came into existense?

• Change came to comes

• Change existense to existence

• Change the question mark to an exclamation point

• Sentence 5 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1C

CCSS.L.K.1D

What is the correct way to write sentences 23 and 24?

(23) Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct. (24) Scientists are still making discoveries.

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists, however, are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct and scientists are still making discoveries.

• Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, but there are scientists. Who are still making discoveries.

• Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists are still making discoveries.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 30?

(30) It is a place that deserves protection, a true Oasis of life.

• Change deserves to deserved

• Delete the comma

• Change Oasis to oasis

• No change should be made in sentence 30.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

(2) In this environment it can be hard to stand out, especially if your relatively new.

• Change environment to enviroment

• Delete the comma

• Change your to you’re

• No change should be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made in sentence 13?

(13) At my previous school, where I was president of the eighth-grade class I learned a lot about what it means to organize my time effectively.

• Delete where

• Insert a comma after class

• Change a lot to alot

• Change means to had meant

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

How should sentence 15 be changed?

(15) My experiences in the past will help me successfully manage everything that needs to be acomplished.

• Change experiences to experience’s

• Change will help to helped

• Change acomplished to accomplished

• Sentence 15 should not be changed.

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CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

What change should be made in sentence 22?

(22) It isn’t easy to represent a large class day after day but I know that I am up to the challenge.

• Insert a comma after day after day

• Change that to this

• Change am to was

• No change should be made in sentence 22.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

What is the correct way to write sentence 26?

(26) In closing, I give you this solemn promise, if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• In closing, I give you this solemn promise. That if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• In closing, I give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• In closing, to give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• Sentence 26 is written correctly in the paper

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CCSS.L.9-10.2B

The meaning of sentence 24 is unclear. The clarity of this sentence can be improved by changing They to —

(23) Hamm became an instant celebrity and the face of women’s soccer. (24) They lined up to have her endorse their products in advertisements. (25) In the most famous of these ads, Hamm challenged Michael Jordan to a series of sports contests, while the song “Anything You Can Do, I Can Do Better” played in the background.

• Some advertisements

• Various women

• Sports companies

• International faces

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D