STAAR Revising Practice

Sentence 8 lacks clarity. What is the MOST effective change Rose can make to improve the clarity of this sentence?

• I began taking karate at age seven when my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something.”

• I began taking karate, when my parents at age seven insisted I get off the couch and “do something.”

• My parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something” when I began taking karate at age seven.

• When I began taking karate, my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something” at age seven.

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

Melody’s opening sentence is unclear. What change should she make in sentence 1 to clarify her introductory paragraph?

• F Change They to Teachers and leaders at our school

• G Change continually to always

• H Change telling us to instructing us

• J Change community to surrounding neighborhood

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

Melody needs a better transition into the third paragraph (sentences 12–17) of her essay. Which of the following could she add before sentence 12 to improve this transition?

• F In researching mentoring programs, I learned of several promising results.

• G As I think about a mentoring program, I have many ideas on how it should work.

• H If struggling youngsters get the help they need, it could benefit teachers, too.

• J Because I believe in the mentoring concept, I’d like to see it at our school.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?

• F Change benefitial to beneficial

• G Insert a comma after people

• H Change healthier to healthiest

• J No change is needed in sentence 4.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 26?

• F Change minimal to minamal

• G Change are to were

• H Delete the comma after appropriate

• J No change is necessary.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September

• Change whom to who

• Change proficient to proficiant

• Change came to comes

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.2.2B

CCSS.L.3.2B

CCSS.L.3.2C

Candice needs a more effective thesis statement for her paper. Which sentence should replace sentence 8 to serve as the thesis statement?

• F There are other barrier reefs in the oceans of the world, but only the Great Barrier Reef is so well known.

• G The Great Barrier Reef of Australia is a supreme example of the mysteries of the natural world because of its wide variety of plant and animal life.

• H Some scientists believe the Great Barrier Reef first began to grow about 18 million years ago.

• J A coral reef like the Great Barrier Reef can grow only in shallow, warm water because it needs light from the sun to survive.

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22–26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• F Sentence 24

• G Sentence 25

• H Sentence 26

• J No sentence should be deleted.

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

How does sentence 28 need to be changed?

• F Change Similar to Similarly

• G Change female to females

• H Change started to would start

• J Insert a comma after Club

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1G

Rose wants to add another detail to help support the ideas in the second paragraph (sentences 6–11). Which sentence should replace sentence 10 to accomplish this goal? (6) I know from experience that studying martial arts can help you improve your physical fitness. (7) I began taking karate at age seven when my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something.” (8) At first it was difficult for me to complete the kicking, punching, and blocking drills in karate. (9) I practiced every week to get my heart pumping and at striking foam pads with my hands to help improve my technique. (10) My dedication paid off, and I eventually worked my way up to the rank of brown belt. (11) I love feeling healthier and knowing that I can defend myself if necessary.

• There were very few kids my age who attend karate daily.

• My parents were happy that I made so many friends in karate class.

• I did not realize kids my age could earn such high ranks in a martial-arts class.

• I have become stronger, faster, and better coordinated than I was when I first started.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RI.7.2