Editing and Revising Sentences

I feeled like a balloon that had just been popped.

• change popped to poped

• change balloon to baloon

• change feeled to felt

• Make no change

Find the mistake in the sentence.  
The boy want to the park.  

• change boy to Boy

• change want to went 

• no change needs to be made

Find the mistake in the sentence.
"Don't talk to my sister that way" said beth. 

• Change beth to Beth 

• change sister to Sister

• no change in the sentence

Combine these two sentences together correctly.
The dog walked on the leash. He was a good boy.

• The dog walked on the leash, because he was a good boy.

• The dog was a good boy, as he walked on the leash.

• The dog walked on the leash, good boy he was.

I am so excited that my mom is coming over for dinner!  

• change ! to . 

• change is to are

• no change in this sentence 

What is the best change we can make to this sentence:
After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer

• Change breif to brief

• Change the , to a ;

• No change needs to be made

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

• Change explained to explains

• Change confident to confidant

• Change safe to safely

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

Fatima realizes she has offered a weak thesis in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 1 and 2 and provide a more effective thesis statement for Fatima’s paper?

(1) Mia Hamm is a soccer player who is fun to study. (2) She is an expert at the sport who has encouraged others to play

• Mia Hamm is an interesting and fun personality, and I am grateful for this opportunity to research her story. I think that as you read my paper, you will agree that she has added great energy to women’s sports in this country and also to sports around the world.

• Mia Hamm is one of the most celebrated female soccer players of all time and is an inspiration to young women everywhere. Her contributions to women’s soccer have had an unmistakable impact on the sport, both in the United States and internationally.

• There is a soccer player in this country that is clearly more talented than all the rest. Her name is Mia Hamm, and she is an outstanding player and a model athlete who works hard to make sure she is always setting an example for other athletes and for the world at large.

• If you don’t know Mia Hamm, you probably don’t know much. Many people say that she is the greatest soccer player of all time because she is so supremely committed to soccer and also to all that it means to herself and the other people of the world.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 32?

• Insert quotation marks before the first and

• Change I think to we think

• Change testament to testiment

• No change needs to be made in sentence 32.