Revision and Editing STAAR

What should you be checking when revising? Click on all that apply *Hint: think of the acronym for revising*

• Add words or sentences

• Capitalize names, places, months, titles, "I"

• Punctuation

• Remove unneeded words or sentences

• Move sentences or words around

What is the best change we can make to this sentence:
After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer

• Change breif to brief

• Change the , to a ;

• No change needs to be made

Choose the correct sentence

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary it detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary. With details what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The 11-year old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.

• The sentence are written correctly in the paper.

Which of the following sentences is correctly punctuated?

• In the dead of the night. The van pulled up.

• Chuck would not, give Jamie the seat.

• Over coffee and toast, Kelly told me about her new job.

• Lemonade. My favorite drink.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence. Choose the sentence with the best revision.

The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike.

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.

• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.

• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.

• The bicycle tire on the bike is flat.

Edit this: "The storm is approaching" he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching." he whispers,

• "The storm is approaching," he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching," he whispers.

• The storm is approaching, he whispers,

Choose the correctly punctuated sentence.

• According to the map Amy whispered we are very close to the hidden treasure.

• "According to the map," Amy whispered, "we are very close to the hidden treasure."

• "According to the map" Amy whispered, "we are very close to the hidden treasure."

• According to the map, Amy whispered, "we are very close to the hidden treasure."

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 16?

• Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

• Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

As students explore texts that were written hundreds of years before, you peer through a window into the world as it was in those days. How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change explore to explored

• Change were written to was written

• Change years to year’s

• Change you to they