2/18/25 Revise and Edit

(1) Then, we decided to go down the hill together. (2) Amy sat in the front, and I sat in the back. (3) We pushed off together and started to go down the hill. (4) The sled was going so fast that it was hard to steer. (5) Then CRASH! We ran into a bush!

Andrea wants to use a more accurate word than go in sentence 3. Which of the following could BEST replace this word?

• creep

• walk

• run

• zoom

"Come here, Bella!" I called?

How should sentence 1 be changed?

• Delete the quotation marks

• Change Come to come

• Delete the exclamation point after Bella

• Change the question mark to a period.

(1) My third surprise was that Max liked me after all. (2) That evening, I gave Landon a good night hug. (3) Then I patted Max’s head. (4) He licked my hand. (5) And wagged his tail.

What is the correct way to write sentences 4 and 5?

• He licked my hand and wagged his tail.

• He licked. My hand and wagged his tail.

• He licked my hand and wagged. His tail.

• Sentences 14 and 15 should not be changed.

Young George Nissen was at the circus when an idea popped into his head. George was a gymnast and had come to see the trapeze artists. At the end of the act, the acrobats let go of the swing and dropped into a safety net. It sent them bouncing high into the air. Nissen thought it would be great for practicing gymnastics. It looked like fun, too!

The meaning of sentence 5 is unclear. Sebastian can improve this sentence by changing it to —

• the swing

• the air

• the trapeze artist

• the net

What is the best transition to be added to the beginning of sentence 8?

(6) We quickly got distracted while exploring the woods. (7) After a while we realized we were no longer on the marked path. (8) We had no idea where we were!

• In fact

• First

• Otherwise

• Before that

The little girl was quite excited to go shopping at the mall in New York city with her grandmother. 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• change New York city to New York City

• change quite to quiet

• change grandmother to Grandmother

• no change is needed

What correction can be made to the following sentence?

I can't beleve that Kaitlyn and Todd played in the treehouse all day long!

• Changed played to play

• Change Kaitlyn to kaitlyn

• Change beleve to believe

• Change the to a

What is the BEST way to combine the sentences below? (1) Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels. (2) He rides his bike without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels after he rides without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels, he would now ride without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels, and he rides without any help.

Amy realizes that there is a sentence in the paragraph below that does not belong. Which sentence should Aimee delete from this paragraph? (1) Charlie knew that to catch fish, he needed three important items: a pole, a hook, and some bait. (2) He now fishes in Lake Sam Rayburn. (3) Charlie makes sure to have a variety of bait. (4) The type he uses depends on the type of fish he plans to catch. (5) Also, he always brings plenty of small and large hooks. (6) Sometimes, he may lose a hook, or a fish may break his line. (7) Many times, he needs an extra one.

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 7

What edit, if any, should be made to the sentence?

Last summer, my family and I saw a museum exhibit about World war I

• change summer to Summer

• change World war I to World War I

• change family to Family

• The sentence is correct.