Revise for Clarity and Coherence

Revise the following sentence for clarity: "The cat, which was black, sat on the mat, and it was very fluffy."

• The black cat sat on the mat, and it was very fluffy.

• The fluffy cat sat on the mat, and it was black.

• The black and fluffy cat sat on the mat.

• The cat sat on the mat, and it was black and fluffy.

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Which sentence best combines these ideas for coherence: "The dog barked loudly. The dog was excited. The dog saw its owner, Mr. Hallbauer."

• The dog barked loudly because it was excited to see Mr. Hallbauer.

• The dog was excited, and it barked loudly, and it saw Mr. Hallbauer.

• The dog saw Mr. Hallbauer, and it barked loudly because it was excited.

• The dog barked loudly, it was excited, it saw Mr. Hallbauer.

Choose the best revision for this sentence: "Mrs. Gaskins ran quickly to the store, she wanted to buy candy, she was very hungry."

• Mrs. Gaskins ran quickly to the store because she wanted to buy candy and was very hungry.

• Mrs. Gaskins was very hungry, she ran quickly to the store, she wanted to buy candy.

• Mrs. Gaskins wanted to buy candy, she was very hungry, she ran quickly to the store.

• Mrs. Gaskins ran quickly to the store, she was very hungry, she wanted to buy candy.

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

Leinhart and Santos were walking through the garden and noticed the flowers. Revise the following sentence for better word choice: "The flowers in the garden are pretty and smell nice."

• The flowers in the garden are beautiful and fragrant.

• The flowers in the garden are nice and pretty.

• The flowers in the garden are pretty and have a nice smell.

• The flowers in the garden are nice and smell pretty.

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

Which sentence best rearranges these ideas for clarity: "Mr. Hallbauer explained the lesson. The students listened carefully. The lesson was about plants."

• Mr. Hallbauer explained the lesson about plants, and the students listened carefully.

• The students listened carefully to the lesson about plants, which Mr. Hallbauer explained.

• The lesson was about plants, and Mr. Hallbauer explained it while the students listened carefully.

• Mr. Hallbauer explained the lesson, and the students listened carefully, it was about plants.

Revise the following sentence for coherence: "Loki noticed the sun was shining. The birds were singing. It was a beautiful day."

• Loki noticed the sun was shining, and the birds were singing, making it a beautiful day.

• The birds were singing, the sun was shining, it was a beautiful day.

• It was a beautiful day, the sun was shining, and the birds were singing.

• The sun was shining, it was a beautiful day, and the birds were singing.

Tags

CCSS.RL.2.10

CCSS.RL.3.10

CCSS.RL.3.6

CCSS.RL.4.10

CCSS.RL.4.6

Choose the best revision for this sentence: "Loki danced gracefully, he was happy, he loved the music."

• Loki danced gracefully because he loved the music and was happy.

• Loki was happy, he danced gracefully, he loved the music.

• Loki loved the music, he was happy, he danced gracefully.

• Loki danced gracefully, he loved the music, he was happy.

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

Revise the following sentence for better sentence structure: "Holt's car was fast, it was red, it zoomed down the street."

• Holt's fast red car zoomed down the street.

• Holt's car was red, it was fast, it zoomed down the street.

• Holt's car zoomed down the street, it was fast and red.

• Holt's red car was fast, it zoomed down the street.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.1F

Which sentence best combines these ideas for clarity: "The rain stopped. The sun came out. Leinhart and Santos went outside to play."

• The rain stopped, and the sun came out, so Leinhart and Santos went outside to play.

• Leinhart and Santos went outside to play because the rain stopped and the sun came out.

• The sun came out, the rain stopped, Leinhart and Santos went outside to play.

• The rain stopped, the sun came out, Leinhart and Santos went outside to play.

Tags

CCSS.RF.2.3F

CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

Revise the following sentence for coherence: "The cake was delicious. It was chocolate. Everyone enjoyed it."

• The chocolate cake was delicious, and everyone enjoyed it.

• The cake was chocolate, it was delicious, everyone enjoyed it.

• Everyone enjoyed the cake, it was chocolate and delicious.

• The cake was delicious, everyone enjoyed it, it was chocolate.