EOC Revising and Editing

Which sentence should replace sentence 2 to provide a more effective claim for this paper?

REMEMBER: Each sentence should connect to the one before it, like links in a chain.

• Regardless of the reason, musical instruments are a meaningful addition to a person’s skill set.

• Throughout history, musical instruments have been enjoyed by young and old alike.

• Clearly, there are many different types of musical instruments, and all are beneficial and valuable.

• However, learning to play a musical instrument can benefit a person’s life in a host of other ways.

Look at the picture. What is your strategy for this type of question?

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CCSS.RI.8.7

CCSS.RI.9-10.7

CCSS.RL.7.7

CCSS.RL.8.7

CCSS.RL.9-10.7

Sentence 7 needs to be revised. rewrite sentence 7 in a clear and effective way.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 12?

• Furthermore

• Therefore

• However

• To illustrate

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

(15) When comparing the brains of amateur musicians, professional musicians, and non-musicians, researchers found that the amount of “gray matter” in the brain increases with musical ability. (16) The study found that professional musicians have the most gray matter, as reported in The Journal of Neuroscience. (17) Amateur musicians have the second most amount of gray matter, and non-musicians have the least.

What revision, if any, is needed in sentence 16?

• A) The study, as reported in The Journal of Neuroscience, found that professional musicians have the most gray matter.

• B) The study found that professional musicians, as reported in The Journal of Neuroscience, have the most gray matter.

• C) The study was reported in The Journal of Neuroscience, it found that professional musicians have the most gray matter.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

The word sad is not the most effective word to use in sentence 26. Which word should replace sad in this sentence?

• afflicted

• mournful

• discouraged

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

What change needs to be made in sentence 4?

• Change there is to theirs

• Change Toastmasters international to Toastmasters International

• Change helps to help

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CCSS.L.2.2C

Select the ONE response that corrects the error in sentence 6. As everyone knows, the best way to become proficient at throwing a football or playing the piano is ____.

• to practice, public speaking

• to practice; public speaking

• to practice public, speaking

• to practice: public speaking

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

What is the correct way to write sentence 7?

• People who belong to public speaking clubs overcome their nerves and bad habits. By standing up to give speeches in warm, supportive environments.

• People who belong to public speaking clubs overcoming their nerves and bad habits by standing up and giving speeches in warm, supportive environments.

• People who belong to public speaking clubs overcome their nerves and bad habits by standing up and giving speeches in warm, supportive environments.

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

What is the correct way to write sentence 9?

• Smedley wanted to promote leadership and communication skills in young men and thought that public speaking clubs would be a good way to do so.

• Smedley wanted to promote leadership and communication skills in young men and thought this. That public speaking clubs would be a good way to do so.

• Smedley wanted to promote leadership and communication skills in young men he thought that public speaking clubs would be a good way to do so.

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CCSS.L.4.1F