Editing & Revising Practice Quiz – Titanic Passage

Which sentence would be the clearest and most concise revision?

• The lifeboats were boarded in a way that was rushed and disorganized, and they were lowered in a rushed manner.

• Boarding the lifeboats became rushed and disorganized, with many lowered overloaded.

• The lifeboats’ boarding process was extremely rushed and disorganized, as they were entering the water in a rushed way.

• The lifeboats were boarding passengers, but they were rushed and disorganized while lowering them.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

Which option fixes the error in parallel structure in the following sentence? Original: Father Byles spent his final moments alive reciting the rosary and other prayers, hearing confessions, and gave absolutions to the dozens of people who huddled around him.

• …reciting the rosary, hearing confessions, and gave absolutions…

• …reciting the rosary, heard confessions, and gave absolutions…

• …reciting the rosary, hearing confessions, and giving absolutions…

• …recited the rosary, hearing confessions, and gave absolutions…

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

Select the revision that removes redundant wording without changing the meaning.

• The revision eliminates unnecessary words while keeping the original meaning.

• The revision adds more details to the sentence.

• The revision changes the meaning of the sentence.

• The revision uses more complex vocabulary without simplifying.

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CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

The stem reached a high angle and surfaced from the water. Which option best revises the original sentence?

• The stern reached a high angle and came up from the water.

• The stern surfaced from the water.

• The stern reached a high angle and rose upwards from the water.

• The stern rose and reached a high angle above the water.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

Which version of the following sentence is most clear and correct?

• The Olympic was over 500 nautical miles away, while the Carpathia, 58 nautical miles away, would arrive in four hours—still too late.

• The Olympic was 500 miles away, the Carpathia was 58 miles away, and it would arrive in about four hours, still too late.

• The Olympic was over 500 nautical miles away, and Carpathia was 58 nautical miles away and it was going to be arriving about four hours too late.

• The Olympic was over 500 nautical miles away, and the Carpathia was 58 nautical miles away. It would arrive in about four hours but was too late to make it.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

Choose the best revision for sentence flow: Original: Wireless operators Jack Phillips and Harold Bride were busy sending out distress signals. The message was initially "CQD-MGY, sinking, need immediate assistance," later interspersed with the newer "SOS" at the suggestion of Bride.

• Wireless operators Jack Phillips and Harold Bride were busy sending out distress signals, the message was initially "CQD-MGY, sinking, need immediate assistance," later "SOS.",

• Wireless operators Jack Phillips and Harold Bride sent out distress signals. The message was first "CQD-MGY, sinking, need immediate assistance." Later, "SOS" was suggested by Bride.

• Wireless operators Jack Phillips and Harold Bride sent out distress signals: the initial message was "CQD-MGY, sinking, need immediate assistance," later interspersed with the newer "SOS" at the suggestion of Bride.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Which sentence maintains consistent verb tense?

• Captain Smith releases the operators and quietly wandered off into the bridge.

• Captain Smith released the operators and then quietly wandered off into the bridge.

• Captain Smith releases the operators, then wanders off quietly into the bridge.

• Captain Smith releasing the operators, then wandered quietly into the bridge.

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CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.11-12.10

CCSS.RL.8.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

Choose the best revision: Original: Passengers were reluctant to leave the warm, well-lit, and safe ship that showed no outward signs of danger, so they were hesitant to board the small, unlit, and open lifeboats.

• Passengers hesitated to leave the comfortable ship and board the small lifeboats.

• Passengers were reluctant to leave the warm, well-lit ship, which appeared safe, so they hesitated to board the lifeboats.

• Passengers were reluctant to leave the ship, which showed no danger, and hesitated to board lifeboats that were small, unlit, and open.

• Passengers hesitated to leave the warm, well-lit, seemingly safe Titanic for the small, unlit, open lifeboats.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Select the option that avoids repetition and improves sentence flow.

• The sentence uses varied language and connects ideas smoothly.

• The sentence repeats the same words multiple times.

• The sentence is choppy and lacks transitions.

• The sentence uses redundant phrases.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

The stern rose to a high angle. The stern then tipped far on its port side. The stern began to sink.

• The stern rose to a high angle, tipped far on its port side, and began to sink.

• The stern rose high, the stern tipped, and the stern sank.

• The stern went up high, then the stern tipped, and the stern began sinking.

• The stern, after rising to a high angle, tipped on its side, and it began sinking down.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5