Worksheets2nd Sem. Exam Review: Editing & Revising
Total questions: 55
Worksheet time: 29mins
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J.T. would like to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentences 1–6).
"Students from around the world are also part of musical marching groups."
1.) Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?
A. After sentence 1
B. After sentence 2
C. After sentence 3
D. After sentence 4
(10) There are no musical cues for the students to use as they march in the changing formations. (11) Furthermore, they walk in perfect step by following the direction of an announcer. (12) Directors bellow loud, sharp commands, such as “Front row, turn left!” and “Cross walk,” over a loudspeaker.
2.) J.T. wants to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 11.
Which of the following can best replace Furthermore in this sentence?
F. For example
G. In conclusion
H. Overall
J. Instead
(15) A misstep by just one student creates a flaw in the perfectly coordinated display that is visible.
3.) What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 15?
A. A misstep by just one student and a flaw is created that is visible in the perfectly coordinated display.
B. A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw in the perfectly coordinated display.
C. A misstep by just one student creates a flaw in the perfectly coordinated display, the flaw is visible.
D. A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw that can be seen in the perfectly coordinated display.
J.T. has included an extraneous sentence in his paper.
4. Which of these sentences should be deleted from this paper?
F. Sentence 9
G. Sentence 13
H. Sentence 18
J. Sentence 20
5.) Mimi’s essay does not have a strong position statement.
Which of the following sentences should replace sentence 6 to serve as an effective position statement?
A. It’s foolish to buy several bottles of water each day when there’s no good reason for doing this.
B. People need to stop doing this now and protest against bottled-water companies.
C. These problems can be solved, however, if people choose to drink water from reusable containers instead of plastic bottles.
D. The list of problems that people are causing, such as increasing pollution, by buying bottled water is endless.
6.) What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?
(8) Bottled water may be attractively packaged. (9) It is simply processed tap water.
F. Bottled water may be attractively packaged, but it is simply processed tap water.
G. Bottled water is simply processed tap water because it is attractively packaged.
H. Bottled water may be attractively packaged, so it is simply processed tap water.
J. Bottled water is attractively packaged, because it is simply processed tap water
(14) The safety of bottled water not only raises health concerns, but bottled water is also significantly overpriced in comparison to tap water. ........(19) The unnecessary use of bottles causes environmental damage at several stages.
(7.) Mimi wants to improve the transition between the third paragraph (sentences 14–18) and the fourth paragraph (sentences 19–23).Which sentence can be added before sentence 19 to accomplish this goal?
A. Because bottled water can cost so much, a reusable water bottle is a wise investment.
B. People think bottled water is harmless, and other plastic containers are just as bad.
C. Money is a concern for many people, so it should be saved whenever possible.
D. Bottled water is a huge monetary expense, but the cost to our planet is even greater.
(21) Also consider that chemicals are released by these many bottles when they are discarded into landfills over hundreds of years and decompose.
8.) What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?
F. Also consider that many bottles are discarded into landfills, where the bottles release chemicals as they decompose over hundreds of years.
G. Also consider that landfills are filled with released chemicals, where they decompose many discarded bottles over hundreds of years.
H. These bottles, decomposing over hundreds of years, should also be considered to release chemicals where they have been discarded into landfills.
J. Over hundreds of years, landfills are filled with many bottles, and it should also be considered that the bottles decompose and release chemicals.
9.) Mimi wants to conclude her essay by motivating her readers to take action. Which of the following statements should she insert after sentence 29 to accomplish this goal?
A. The future of our planet depends on people like you doing away with a terrible threat—plastic water bottles.
B. We should make the decision today to be smart about our finances and responsible with our planet by opting for reusable water bottles.
C. Think of how much you can help the fish in our lakes, rivers, and oceans by avoiding bottled water.
D. Choose reusable water bottles, and watch your savings grow.
Which of the following is NOT an example of a transitional word or phrase?
As an example
He said
Likewise
On the other hand
Which is the best replacement transition?
When joining two sentences together, what goes before a FAN BOY (For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet)?
comma
period
semicolon
colon
The writer wants convey that…
A leader has been managed before being
what he is now
A leader leads people who they like only
Being a leader will make one wiser
The one who has been led won’t be a leader
A leader must become the one who leads others
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?
(2) Three hundred miles isn’t hardly that far, so you would probably expect the island to be home to the same sorts of plants and animals found on the mainland.
Change hardly to really
Delete so
Insert a comma after plants
No change should be made in this sentence.
How should sentence 5 be changed?
(5) How is it possible that such a unique island came into existense?
Change came to comes
Change existense to existence
Change the question mark to an exclamation point
Sentence 5 should not be changed.
What is the correct way to write sentences 23 and 24?
(23) Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct. (24) Scientists are still making discoveries.
Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists, however, are still making discoveries.
Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct and scientists are still making discoveries.
Many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, but there are scientists. Who are still making discoveries.
Although many of the species that once made their home on Madagascar are now extinct, scientists are still making discoveries.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 30?
(30) It is a place that deserves protection, a true Oasis of life.
Change deserves to deserved
Delete the comma
Change Oasis to oasis
No change should be made in sentence 30.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?
(2) In this environment it can be hard to stand out, especially if your relatively new.
Change environment to enviroment
Delete the comma
Change your to you’re
No change should be made in this sentence.
What change should be made in sentence 13?
(13) At my previous school, where I was president of the eighth-grade class I learned a lot about what it means to organize my time effectively.
Delete where
Insert a comma after class
Change a lot to alot
Change means to had meant
How should sentence 15 be changed?
(15) My experiences in the past will help me successfully manage everything that needs to be acomplished.
Change experiences to experience’s
Change will help to helped
Change acomplished to accomplished
Sentence 15 should not be changed.
What change should be made in sentence 22?
(22) It isn’t easy to represent a large class day after day but I know that I am up to the challenge.
Insert a comma after day after day
Change that to this
Change am to was
No change should be made in sentence 22.
What is the correct way to write sentence 26?
(26) In closing, I give you this solemn promise, if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.
In closing, I give you this solemn promise. That if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.
In closing, I give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.
In closing, to give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.
Sentence 26 is written correctly in the paper
The meaning of sentence 24 is unclear. The clarity of this sentence can be improved by changing They to —
(23) Hamm became an instant celebrity and the face of women’s soccer. (24) They lined up to have her endorse their products in advertisements. (25) In the most famous of these ads, Hamm challenged Michael Jordan to a series of sports contests, while the song “Anything You Can Do, I Can Do Better” played in the background.
Some advertisements
Various women
Sports companies
International faces
Fatima realizes she has offered a weak thesis in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 1 and 2 and provide a more effective thesis statement for Fatima’s paper?
(1) Mia Hamm is a soccer player who is fun to study. (2) She is an expert at the sport who has encouraged others to play
Mia Hamm is an interesting and fun personality, and I am grateful for this opportunity to research her story. I think that as you read my paper, you will agree that she has added great energy to women’s sports in this country and also to sports around the world.
Mia Hamm is one of the most celebrated female soccer players of all time and is an inspiration to young women everywhere. Her contributions to women’s soccer have had an unmistakable impact on the sport, both in the United States and internationally.
There is a soccer player in this country that is clearly more talented than all the rest. Her name is Mia Hamm, and she is an outstanding player and a model athlete who works hard to make sure she is always setting an example for other athletes and for the world at large.
If you don’t know Mia Hamm, you probably don’t know much. Many people say that she is the greatest soccer player of all time because she is so supremely committed to soccer and also to all that it means to herself and the other people of the world.
What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?
(14) And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.
And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.
- "Re-seeing" paper as whole
- Focus on organization, audience, development, & support
- Looking at stronger thesis statements, transitions, and clarity
Editing
Revising
- Focus on individual words and sentences
- Word choice, spelling, grammar, punctuation
- Comes after proofreading
Editing
Revising
Answer the following question based on this paragraph:
(1) Everyone has wants and needs that cost money. (2) Some people want the independence that comes with having a car, and some want the latest technology or the newest fashions. (3) Others need to help with the family finances. (4) Working during the school year might sound impossible because of school work and other activities. (5) Additionally, most students have three months without school, during which they could work. (6) Yet, since 1990, the number of teens with summer jobs has steadily declined year after year. (7) This means teens are not earning money for themselves and are not learning important life skills. (8) I plan to get a job this summer.
Justine would like to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 5. Which of the following is the best replacement for Additionally?
Therefore
For example
However
Finally
If you don't curtail your spending, you'll be broke in no time at all! Which word is a synonym of "curtail"?
A. reduce
B. follow
C. behind
D. buy
I _____ that boy is wonderful
think
am thinking
thinks
thought
Which sentence shows correct comma usage?
The group, although excited, to be traveling stood quietly in line.
Jess one of my cousins from Seattle, is coming to visit today.
Marcus, one of the new students, tries hard to impress the team.
Their boots which had gotten wet, were by the door.
Which sentence uses its or it’s correctly?
The bullfrog let out it’s loud croak.
Did the forecast say it’s supposed to rain?
How do you know its a good presentation?
Be careful when its foggy outside.
"No, I won't eat no lima beans," stated Ray, "but I will eat cake."
capitalize the word but
delete the comma after No
delete the quotations before but
change no to any
Which of the following is NOT an example of a transitional word or phrase?
As an example
Likewise
He said
On the other hand
What change should be made in sentence 3?
(3) Leaves brush against your windows and the chirps of birds echo through your room.
Change Leaves to Leafes
Change brush to brushes
Insert a comma after windows
Change through to threw
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 5?
(5) Some people like them so much that we created tree house hotels for guests.
Change like to likes
Change we to they
Change created to creating
No change needs to be made.
What change should be made in sentence 8?
(8) Tropical rain forests, thickly wilderness areas, or trees along an island shore are just a few places they are located.
Change rain forests to rain forest’s
Change thickly to thick
Delete the comma after areas
Insert a comma after shore
What change should be made in sentence 13?
(13) For example, a person in a rain forest will likely need to walks up wobbly narrow bridges and use ropes for support.
Change need to needs
Change walks to walk
Change use to using
No change is needed.
What change should be made to sentence 18?
(18) In Sweden their is a tree house hotel that is shaped like a bird’s nest.
Change their to there
Insert a comma after hotel
Change shaped to shape
Change bird’s to birds
What is the correct way to write sentence 22?
(22) The Frio River Treetop is closer to home it is located near Leakey, Texas.
The Frio River Treetop is closer. To home, it is located near Leakey, Texas.
The Frio River Treetop is closer to home. It is located near Leakey, Texas.
The Frio River Treetop is closer to home as a result it is located, near Leakey, Texas.
No change is needed.
What change, if any, should be made to sentence 26?
(26) This makes it a greatest spot for someone who is looking for a more active setting.
Change makes to make
Change greatest to great
Insert a comma after spot
No change needs to be made in this sentence.
What change is needed in sentence 28?
(28) You may prefer just to climb in a traditionul backyard tree house.
Change prefer to prefers
Change climb to climbing
Change traditionul to traditional
No change needs to be made.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 29?
(29) Either way, tree houses provide a great way to enjoy nature.
Change provide to providing
Change a to an
Change enjoy to injoy
No change is needed in this sentence.
What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?
(4) Dolphins even find ways to entertain themselfs under the water.
Change find to found
Change entertain to entertaining
Change themselfs to themselves
No change should be made in sentence 4.
What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?
(6) Unlike fish, dolphins are mammals, that breathe air.
Change are to were
Delete the comma after mammals
Change that to they
No change should be made in sentence 6.
What is the correct way to write sentence 10?
(10) One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
One kind of an air bubble is shaped like a circle and called a bubble ring. Happening to be the perfect sea toy.
One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, and called a bubble ring. Then it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle, called a bubble ring it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
One kind of air bubble is shaped like a circle. It is called a bubble ring, and it happens to be the perfect sea toy.
How should sentence 11 be changed?
(11) Many Scientists have filmed and photographed dolphins playing with bubble rings.
Change Scientists to scientists
Insert a comma after filmed
Change playing to play
Change rings to ring
What change should be made in sentence 22?
(22) The bubbles causes the fish to move toward the surface of the water and scatter.
Change causes to cause
Change surface to surfase
Insert a comma after water
Change scatter to scater
What change should be made in sentence 20?
(20) Some experts were thinking that dolphins also use bubble rings to help them hunt for food.
Change experts to Experts
Change were thinking to think
Change help to helps
Change hunt to hunting
Hint: When you mean it is or it has, use an apostrophe. When you are using its as a possessive, don't use the apostrophe.
Hint: add ' to the end of plural nouns only if they end in -s like in two cats' toys.
Hint: Use the semicolon if you have two independent clauses connected without a conjunction.
(9) Before people can begin riding the waves, they must gather the necessary equipment. (10) A surfboard, which can be selected from a wide range of weights and styles, is needed first. (11) Beginners usually get lighter, more buoyant boards,while experts choose heavier, more maneuverable boards. (12) Next comes surfboard wax, a substance that is rubbed on the board to make it easier to grip.(13) After that, a surfer may want to purchase a surfboard leash, a strap that connects the board to one of the surfer’s ankles. (14) That way the board won’t get lost when the surfer falls off. (15) It takes a lot of practice to get really good at surfing and not fall off. (16) And finally, surfers who plan to swim in cold water will usually want to buy or rent a wet suit to stay warm.
Sentence 4 is unclear, to improve the sentence change it to--
