SPECIFIC Concrete Details (Detailed Details)

SPECIFIC Concrete Details (Detailed Details)

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• I cheated on my vocabulary test by using my phone in the back of the class; Mrs. Griffith reproached me with a look.

• On Wednesday, I secretly pulled out my phone to cheat on the vocabulary test Mrs. Griffith had given us. While I believed that I had gotten away with my scheme, Mrs. Griffith came and looked at me with such disgust and betrayal that I knew that I had failed her and the test.

Multiple Select

In the previous slide some of the details that increased the level of writing included...

• disgust

• betrayal

• disappointment

• sadness

Concrete Details

• are supposed to be specific and give the reader a clear picture of what you're thinking

• the reader shouldn't have to fill in any blanks

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• I went to the salon immediately after school today to get my hair deep conditioned after I singed my hair while trying to watch my favorite TV show and fix it at the same time.

• I went to the salon to get my hair done after school.

Multiple Choice

In the previous slide, when did the writer go to the salon?

• Immediately after school

• After soccer practice

• Before band

• Right after school

Concrete Details

• concrete details come from HELPS

• What is a time in history, entertainment, literature, personal, or sports that would prove your point?

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• I usually spend hours of my time doing homework, which takes away from relaxation.

• Last weekend, I was not able to go to the movies with my friends because I was working on a long history project.

Multiple Choice

In the previous slide, the writer was working on a project for what subject?

• English

• history

• science

• math

Concrete Details

• tie back to your thesis statement and relate to your topic sentence

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• The two boys went to go catch some fish at the park.

• Michael and Enrique both went to Comanche Trail Park in order to catch some Largemouth Bass.

Multiple Choice

In the previous slide, the two boys went to go catch

• some fish

• a lot of fish

• so many fish

• turtles

Concrete Details

• Show/Don't Tell

• Tell me you've had an experience without telling me you had an experience

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• I like playing video games in my free time because it's really fun.

• I enjoy playing video games like Call of Duty and Apex because they're teeming with excitement and challenges.

Multiple Choice

"...they're teeming with excitement and challenges," replaced what phrase from the less detailed sentence?

• because it's really fun.

• because they're exciting.

• because they're challenging.

• because Mrs. G won't stop talking about eSports.

Transitions for Concrete Details

• For example

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• My parents once took my siblings to the aquarium. They had a thrilling time watching and learning about fish.

• Three months ago, my mom took my siblings to the aquarium in Dallas where they had a thrilling time learning about tropical fish.

Multiple Choice

What kind of fish did the writer and his family learn about?

• tropical

• clown

• saltwater

• oceanic

Transitions for Concrete Details

• For Instance

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• On Saturday, my friends and I used our free movie tickets to see the 10:00 p.m. showing of The Croods: A New Age.

• Over the weekend my friends and I went to the movies together.

Transitions for Concrete Details

• In particular

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• Since I recently obtained my permit, my mom lets me drive to Walmart with her to practice my driving skills.

• I drive my mom to the store to practice my driving skills.

Multiple Choice

Walmart replaced which abstract detail?

• store

• around

• places

• grocery shopping

Transitions for Concrete Details

• In fact

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• I am always laughing with my friends.

• My friends and I are constantly laughing because we're always telling dumb inside jokes.

Multiple Choice

What kind of jokes created more detail within the sentence?

• inside

• dad

• boomer

• knock-knock

Transitions for Concrete Details

• More specifically

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• My dad and I tore down the old greenhouse.

• My father and I used sledgehammers and axes to tear down the old greenhouse that hadn’t been used in years.

Multiple Choice

What kind of jokes created more detail within the sentence?

• inside

• dad

• boomer

• knock-knock

Multiple Choice

Which sentence has more detail and gives a clearer picture to the audience?

• Recently, I had brace put on to repair my crooked teeth.

• Recently, and orthodontist put braces on my crooked teeth and to repair my overbite.

Multiple Choice

What kind of jokes created more detail within the sentence?

• inside

• dad

• boomer

• knock-knock