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I love eating noodles, like they make a slurp when I suck them in.

• I love eating noodles. They make a slurp when I suck them in.
• no change is needed
• I love eating noodles. Like they make a slurp when I suck them in.
• I love eating noodles; like, they make, a slurp when I suck them in.

John and Paul are standing over ___________

• their
• they're
• there
• thay're

I was sitting at lunch and Susanna told me a joke, I laughed so hard milk gushed out of my nose.

• I was sitting at lunch and Susanna told me a joke, but I laughed so hard milk gushed out of my nose.
• I was sitting at lunch and Susanna told me a joke, I'm laughing so hard milk gushed out of my nose.
• I was sitting at lunch and Susanna told me a joke I laughed so hard milk gushed out of my nose.
• I was sitting at lunch and Susanna told me a joke. I laughed so hard milk gushed out of my nose.

Joe knew we were wanting to buy some magazines. He drop in after dinner to sell us a subscription.

• Joe knew we want to buy some magazines. He drop in after dinner to sell us a subscription.
• Joe knows we wanted to buy magazines, and so he drop in after dinner to sell us a subscription.
• Joe knew we were wanting to buy some magazines. He dropped in after dinner to sell us a subscription.
• Joe knew we were wanting to buy some magazines. He drop by after dinner to sell us a subscription.

I love ice cream. Is one of my favorite things to eat.

• I love ice cream, its one of my favorite things to eat.
• I love ice cream. It's one of my favorite things to eat.
• I love ice cream; and one of my favorite things to eat.
• I love ice cream is one of my favorite things to eat.

This is our home. Welcome to the _________.

• Barbers
• Barber's
• Barbers'

I am standing on a street corner in New York watching a parade. There is a big float going by and on the back of it is sitting a fat man in a red and white suit. He has a long beard, black boots, and a red and white hat. What time of year is it?

• the summer
• Halloween
• Christmas
• St. Patrick's Day

The ______________  came to the conclusion that the _________ oceans  are indeed warming each year.

• scientist's / worlds'
• scientists / worlds' 
• scientists / world's
• scientists' / world's

Joan is glad to be home she is very tired. 

• This sentence is correct.
• Joan is glad to be home; she is very tired.
• Joan is glad to be home, but she is very tired.
• Joan is glad to be home, she is very tired.

Going to the rodeo on a beautiful black horse that has a blazing white star on his forehead and a luxurious mane of thick hair.

• This sentence is correct.
• This is a sentence fragment.