Editing and Revising Quiz "Give Me the City Life!"

Justin wants to improve his introduction. How can he rewrite sentence 6 to provide more detail and imagery?

• I told my parents in every way I could think of that the city simply wasn’t the place for me.

• The traffic, the busyness, and the noises of the city would be nothing compared with the beautiful, amazing, lovely countryside.

• Without fields to roam, horses to ride, and streams to fish, what could the city possibly have to offer?

• The city wasn’t going to be the great place to live that the country had always been.

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 13?

• I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed and straight to the park from a bike path.

• I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed, and then a bike path that takes me straight to the park is there.

• I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed, I can then follow a bike path that takes me straight to the park.

• I can walk to the bike store to get a tire fixed and then follow a bike path that takes me straight to the park.

• At the beginning of the paragraph

• After sentence 10

• After sentence 11

• This sentence is not relevant and should not be added to this paragraph.

Justin would like to tell more about the idea he expressed in sentence 21. Which sentence could BEST follow and support sentence 21?

• The restaurants offer a variety of foods from so many different places around the globe.

• There are people from every country in the world who live near me now.

• China, Japan, Korea, and Thailand are thousands of miles away from the world I know.

• One day I can eat a gyro, a type of Greek sandwich, and the next day I can enjoy pho, a Vietnamese noodle soup.

Justin can improve the clarity of sentence 22 by changing it to —

• my house

• my world

• my yard

• the food

Justin has used a poor choice of words in sentence 24. He should change stuff to —

• rituals

• items

• opportunities

• places