"In Sync"--Revising

J.T. would like to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentences 1–6): Students from around the world are also part of musical marching groups." Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?

• A After sentence 1

• B After sentence 2

• C After sentence 4

• D After sentence 5

J.T. wants to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 11. Which of the following can best replace Furthermore in this sentence?

• F For example

• G In conclusion

• H Overall

• J Instead

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 15?

• A A misstep by just one student and a flaw is created that is visible in the perfectly coordinated display.

• B A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw in the perfectly coordinated display.

• C A misstep by just one student creates a flaw in the perfectly coordinated display, the flaw is visible.

• D A misstep by just one student creates a visible flaw that can be seen in the perfectly coordinated display

J.T. has included an extraneous sentence in his paper. Which of these sentences should be deleted from this paper?

• F Sentence 9

• G Sentence 13

• H Sentence 18

• J Sentence 20