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Which sentence is strongest?

• It has blue eyes and they are also glowing.

• It has blue eyes.

• It has very blue eyes that are very nice.

• Its blue eyes glow.

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

Which sentence is strongest?

• She has black hair that has a pink streak.

• A pink streak snakes through her black hair.

• Her hair looks normal.

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

Which sentence is strongest?

• There was a lot of trash and there was so much trash that Ben almost got crushed.

• An avalanche of trash nearly crushed Ben.

• An avalanche of Starbucks cups and Coke bottles flattens shopping carts and pallets, nearly crushing Ben.

• There was a lot of trash around Ben.

Tags

CCSS.RI.6.4

CCSS.RI.7.4

CCSS.RL.5.4

CCSS.RL.6.4

CCSS.RL.7.4

REVISE: It is very gross and weird.

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.5

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

What's your number?

• 1

• 2

• 3

• 4

What do you think of this new finger system?

• It's great!

• It's ok.

• Don't like it.

• It's a terrible idea. What were you thinking?!

Tags

CCSS.RL.2.6

CCSS.RL.8.3