Editing and Revising Blitz

(TGBR) What transition would be most appropriate to use at the beginning of sentence 6?

• As a matter of concern
• For further evidence
• To wipe away any doubt

• For this reason among others

(TGBR) Candice needs a more effective thesis statement for her paper. Which sentence should replace sentence 8 to serve as the thesis statement?

• There are other barrier reefs in the oceans of the world, but only the Great Barrier Reef is so well known
• The Great Barrier Reef of Australia is a supreme example of the mysteries of the natural world because of its wide variety of plant and animal life
• Some scientists believe the Great Barier Reef first began to grow about 18 million years ago.
• A coral reef like the Great Barrier Reef can only grow in shallow, warm water because it neds light from the sun to survive.

(TGBR) Candice needs a topic sentence for the third paragraph (sentences 19-21). Which of the following sentences should be inserted before sentence 19 to introduce the ideas in this paragraph?

• Over time a vast array of creatures has come to inhabit the Great Barrier Reef
• Marine animal species that are threatened are protected by the Great Barrier Reef Maine Park Authority
• The biodiveristy of the Great Barrier Reef ensures its long-term existence.
• The waters along the Great Barrier Reef provide a habitat for marine animals that researchers study.

(TGBR) Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22-26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• Sentence 24
• Sentence 25
• Sentence 26
• No sentence should be deleted.

(TGBR) Candice would like to improve her concluding sentence by summing up the ideas she has presented. Which sentence should she use to replace sentence 35?

• Finally, we must protect the Great Barrier Reef from being destroyed so future generations can enjoy it.
• How much still remains to be discovered about the Great Barrier Reef of Australia is anybody's guess.
• Researchers should explore the oceans further to try to find other natural wonders like the Great Barrier Reef
• Attracting visitors from around the world, the Great Barrier Reef has a beauty that is perhaps uinequaled anywhere on Earth.

(FNH) What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

• She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily, between her home and school.
• She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.
• She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked; the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.
• She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

(FNH) What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 10?

• Change have run to ran
• Delete the comma after year
• Change was forced to is forced
• Make no change

(FNH) What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September
• Change whom to who
• Change proficient to proficiant
• Change came to comes

(FNH) What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 25?

• Insert a comma after performance
• Change the comma after 1926 to a semicolon
• Change mechanical to machanical
• No change should be made