Disagreeing Sources Essay Revision Quiz 1st-3rd period

WHO SAID THIS?

"A friend of mine says that the first draft is the down draft--­­you just get it down. The second draft is the up draft­­--you fix it up. You try to say what you have to say more accurately. And the third draft is the dental draft, where you check every tooth, to see if it's loose or cramped or decayed, or even, God help us, healthy."

• Anne Lamott

• Stephen King

• Susan Jacoby

• Margaret Kantz

WHICH VERSION IS A BETTER OPENING SENTENCE FOR THIS ESSAY?

• Cancel culture or some version like it has been around for all of human society, but started to become more popular around 2016.

• Some version of cancel culture has been in evidence for all of human history, but it started to become more prominent around 2016.

Since then many celebrities have been canceled who were once beloved figures in our communities. Some of these people are Kanye West, Donald Trump, and J.K. Rowling.

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• communities:

• communities. Such as

• communities; including,

Some other things that have also been canceled are controversial historical figures because of what people think they represent, one of the most notable is Christopher Columbus.

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• Some that have been canceled as well are controversial figures

• Some controversial historical figures have also been cancelled

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Some other things that have also been canceled are controversial historical figures because of what people think they represent, one of the most notable is Christopher Columbus.

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• represent; one

• represent, but one

• represent; therefore, one

My sources address the use of cancel culture and if it has gone too far. They also discuss how cancel culture has affected society and the history of it.

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• how cancel culture effects society and it's history

• how cancel culture has affected society and history

• the history of cancel culture and its effect on society

All of the authors were able to find one thing in common which is that there are good and bad things about cancel culture.

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• All of the authors agreed that there is a lack of consensus about cancel culture.

• All of the authors were able to find one thing in common, which is that there are good and bad things about cancel culture.

• While the authors address both positive and negative effects of cancel culture, their assessments differ based on their political stance.

Now we will take a look at the different perspectives of cancel culture.

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• Now let's examine the different perspectives of cancel culture.

• Here is the first source's perspective on cancel culture.

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In his article, “Cancel Culture and Academic Freedom: A Perspective from Democratic-Deliberative Education Philosophy”, Trio Kurniawan argues that cancel culture shouldn’t be allowed in places of education because it takes away academic freedom.

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• In his article “Cancel Culture and Academic Freedom: A Perspective from Democratic-Deliberative Education Philosophy”, Trio Kurniawan

• In his article “Cancel Culture and Academic Freedom: A Perspective from Democratic-Deliberative Education Philosophy,” Trio Kurniawan

• In his article “Cancel Culture and Academic Freedom: A Perspective from Democratic-Deliberative Education Philosophy” Trio Kurniawan

Kurniawan values freedom more than social justice, “cancel culture becomes a parasite when in the name of freedom of opinion people boycott the arguments of the interlocutors” (Kurniawan 10).

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• social justice: “cancel culture becomes a parasite when in the name of freedom of opinion people boycott the arguments of the interlocutors” (10).

• social justice “cancel culture becomes a parasite when in the name of freedom of opinion people boycott the arguments of the interlocutors” (10).

• social justice; “cancel culture becomes a parasite when in the name of freedom of opinion people boycott the arguments of the interlocutors” (Kurniawan 10).