IELTS A - Lesson 13 - Writing Correction

The essay provides a clear response to the prompt by expressing agreement with the statement that people are less active in their free time compared to the past.

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• Coherence and Cohesion

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• Grammar Range & Accuracy

The writer maintains a consistent position throughout the essay, consistently arguing that people are indeed less active nowadays

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• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

While consistency is maintained, the clarity of the position could be strengthened by explicitly stating it in the introduction and reaffirming it in the conclusion.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation that could be addressed.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

The writer demonstrates a basic level of grammatical control. However, there are some errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and agreement.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

The essay demonstrates a coherent structure overall, with clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

However, the second paragraph discusses the impact of computers on physical activity, while the third paragraph shifts to the topic of increasing popularity of some physical activities.

This abrupt transition affects the logical flow of ideas.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the topic, such as the influence of computers, changes in physical activities, and the overall conclusion.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

There is some variety in word choice, but certain terms are repeated throughout, such as "active," "people," and "less."

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy

Frequently using common terms like "active" or "less," incorporate synonyms or more precise terms to convey your ideas effectively. For instance, instead of repeatedly using "less active," consider alternatives like "sedentary" or "inactive" to add depth to your expression.

• Task Response

• Coherence and Cohesion

• Lexical Resource

• Grammar Range & Accuracy