Sentence Revision and Combination Exercises Final Version

1. What is the best way to revise the following sentences?

Leonard Pike was later the creator of the Texas sweet onion. Before that, he

first made a better cucumber for making pickles.

• Leonard pike made a better cucumber for making pickles. First, he made the

  Texas sweet onion.

• Leonard Pike created the Texas sweet onion because he made a better

  cucumber for making pickles.

• First, Leonard Pike made a better cucumber for making pickles. Later, he

  created the Texas sweet onion.

2. What is the best way to combine the following sentences?

Pike was a horticulture professor at Texas A&M. Pike worked with a team of

over fifty A&M students to create a better onion.

• Working as a horticulture professor, Pike worked with a team of over fifty A&M

  students to create a better onion.

• Pike was a horticulture professor at Texas A&M, but Pike worked with a team

  of over fifty A&M students to create a better onion.

• Pike was a horticulture professor at Texas A&M, Pike worked with a team of

  over fifty A&M students to create a better onion.

3. What is the best way to revise the following sentences?

The Texas sweet onion he created was lower in the compounds. That make

your eyes water when you cut them.

• The Texas sweet onion he creates was lower in the compounds that make

  your eyes water when you cut them.

• The Texas sweet onion he created. Was lower in the compounds that make

  your eyes water when you cut them.

• The Texas sweet onion he created was lower in the compounds that make

  your eyes water when you cut them.

4. What is the best way to combine the following sentences?

Leonard Pike also included more of the compounds in onions that are good

for our health. Pike also designed the onion to have even layers to peel.

• Leonard Pike also included more of the compounds in onions that are good

  for our health, Pike also designed the onion to have even layers to peel.

• Leonard Pike also included more of the compounds in onions that are good

  for our health, so he also designed the onion to have even layers to peel.

• Leonard Pike also included more of the compounds in onions that are good

  for our health and designed it to have even layers to peel.

5. What is the best way to combine the following sentences?

The Texas blue topaz is our state gem. The Texas blue topaz is a light blue color.

• The Texas blue topaz is our state gem, the Texas blue topaz is a light blue

  color.

• The Texas blue topaz is our state gem and the Texas blue topaz is a light

  blue color.

• The Texas blue topaz, our state gem, is a light blue color.

6. What is the best way to revise the following sentences?

Although the Texas blue topaz is rare. The Texas blue topaz is still found

near Mason, Texas.

• Although the Texas blue topaz is rare, the Texas blue topaz is still, found near

  Mason, Texas.

• Although the Texas blue topaz is rare. It is still found near Mason, Texas.

• Although the Texas blue topaz is rare, it is still found near Mason, Texas.

7. What is the best way to revise the following sentences?

The Jones family found dinosaur tracks near the Paluxy River. Based on the

size of the tracks and bones found nearby. Scientists determined the

dinosaur to be a Brachiosaur.

• The Jones family found dinosaur tracks near the Paluxy River. Based on the

  size of the tracks and bones found nearby. Scientists determined, the

  dinosaur to be a Brachiosaur.

• The Jones family found dinosaur tracks near the Paluxy River. Based on the

  size of the tracks and bones found nearby, scientists determined the dinosaur

  to be a Brachiosaur.

8. What is the best way to revise the following sentences?

The Brachiosaur became our state dinosaur in 1997. Because scientists later

discovered the fossils did not belong to a Brachiosaur. But to a new

species. The name was changed to Paluxysaurus Jonesi. In 2009.

• The Brachiosaur became our state dinosaur in 1997. Scientists later

  discovered the fossils belonged to a new species, not the Brachiosaur. The

  name was changed to Paluxysaurus Jonesi in 2009.

• The Brachiosaur became our state dinosaur in 1997. Because scientists

  discovered the fossils did not belong to a Brachiosaur. But to a new species,

  the name was changed to Paluxysaurus Jonesi, in 2009.

9. What is the correct way to write the following sentences?

The school children of Mission, Texas, thought it would be a good idea to

have a state snack. Since Mission Tortilla Factory was located in their town.

They decided chips and salsa would be the ideal state treat.

• The school children of Mission, Texas, thought it would be a good idea to have

  a state snack, since Mission Tortilla Factory was located in their town, they

  decided chips and salsa would be the ideal state treat.

• The school children of Mission, Texas, thought it would be a good idea to have

  a state snack. Since Mission Tortilla Factory was located in their town, they

  decided chips and salsa would be the ideal state treat.

10. What is the correct way to write the following sentences?

After writing many letters to their state representatives. The children got

their wish. In 2003. Chips and salsa became our state snack.

• After writing many letters to their state representatives, the children got their

  wish. In 2003, chips and salsa became our state snack.

• After writing many letters to their state representatives the children got their

  wish in 2003 chips and salsa became our state snack.

• The sentences were already correct.