Revise and Edit English II

Erosion is the process of earth being broken into small pieces by wind or water. Large boulders can become sand. Mountains can become hills. Which is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• Large boulders can become sand and mountains can becomes hills.

• Large boulders can become sand, and mountains can become hills.

• Large boulders can become sand, then mountains can become hills.

Many dogs are used as work animals. (2) German Shepherds are used in police work. (3) Retrievers are used as service dogs. (4) Dogs can be great helpers to their owners. Which is the best way to combine sentences 2 and 3? 

• A. German Shepherds are used in police work then Retrievers are used as service dogs.

•  B. German Shepherds are used in police work because Retrievers are used as service dogs. 

• C. German Shepherds are used in police work, and Retrievers are used as service dogs. 

What is the correct way to write sentence 3?

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied, walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied; walking slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked, slowly into the kitchen.

How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change I to you

• Change weren’t finished to wasn’t finished

• Change my to you

• Sentence 5 should not be changed.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 11?

• Change ones to wons

• Change available to availible

• Change grosery to grocery

• Sentence 11 does not need to be changed.

How should sentence 19 be changed?

• Change know to no

• Change it’s to its

• Change mom to Mom

• No change needs to be made.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 28?

• Change though to tho

• Change the comma after surprised to a semicolon

• Change feel to fill

• Sentence 28 does not need to be changed.

Which sentence could be added after sentence 2 to strengthen the introduction to this story?

• I think the door needs painting.

• I am half as old as my brother.

• In the meantime, our car needs a car wash and some gas.

• At this rate, it will be August before you ever get out the door.

Nina would like to add the following sentence to the eighth paragraph (sentences 21-25). "They got right to work." Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 22

• After sentence 23

• After sentence 24

Nina is concerned that there is a sentence in the eighth paragraph (sentences 21-25) that does not add anything to this paper. Which sentence should Nina delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25