Revision and Editing STAAR

On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down, he said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls. He went to the top, looked down, and said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down. He said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down. And said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle. Over Niagara falls, he went to the top, looked down, and said things just didn’t feel right.

He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

• Change explained to explains

• Change confident to confidant

• Change safe to safely

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

“I am proud of Rafa’s decision,” he commented, and I think it is a great testament to his character and courage.”

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 32?

• Insert quotation marks before the first and

• Change I think to we think

• Change testament to testiment

• No change needs to be made in sentence 32.

According to Philip Davis one of the English professors involved in the study, “Serious literature acts like a rocket-booster to the brain.” How should sentence 23 be changed?

• Change According to Acording

• Insert a comma after Davis

• Change Serious to serious

• Sentence 23 should not be changed.

Thomas wants to improve his opening paragraph. How can he rewrite sentence 1 to provide more detail and imagery?

• The old man swayed back and forth as he rode a donkey along a winding dirt road.

• A donkey traveled along a road with an old man on his back.

• An old man was on the back of a donkey on a dirt road.

• The old man moved on a donkey in order to get to town.

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 4?

• Twice within the last hour, the four-footed creature had stumbled and almost fallen and catching itself at the last possible moment before taking a tumble into a ditch that...

• Twice within the last hour, the four-footed creature had stumbled, and then fell and catching itself at the last possible moment before taking a tumble into a ditch that paralleled the road on either side

• Twice within the last hour, the four-footed creature had stumbled and fallen and catching itself at the last possible moment before taking a tumble into a ditch that

• Twice within the last hour, the four-footed creature had stumbled and almost fallen, catching itself at the last possible moment before taking a tumble into a ditch that paralleled the road on either side.

Thomas did not maintain a consistent point of view in the first paragraph of this paper. What revision should he make in sentence 5 to correct this problem?

• Change the old man to the old men

• Change he pulled out to they pulled out

• Change it to them

• Change ribbon to donkey

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

• Delete the comma

• Change does to did

• Change had to has

• Make no change

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 3?

• Delete the comma

• Change shuffeled to shuffled

• Change foot to feet

• Make no change

What change needs to be made in sentence 7?

• Change Lets to Let’s

• B Change see to sees

• Change fleece to fleese

• Change these to this