Revising- Breakfast Passage

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 19, 20, and 21?

• The idea of eating cereal for breakfast was promoted by the late 1800s by John Kellogg and Charles Post the two men we now recognize as big names in breakfast cereal.

• Although the idea of eating cereal for a healthy breakfast was being promoted in the late 1800s, John Kellogg and Charles Post were recognized as two of the biggest names in cereal.

• By the late 1800s, John Kellogg and Charles Post, who we now recognize as two of the biggest names in breakfast cereal, promoted the idea of eating cereal for health.

• The idea of eating healthy cereal was promoted by the late 1800s and John Kellogg and Charles Post promoted this idea so we now recognize them as the two biggest names in breakfast cereal.

Lyle has not used the most effective word in sentence 24. Which word should best replace happening to create a more effective sentence?

• unfolding

• growth

• progress

• development

Lyle wants to add a supporting sentence to the fifth paragraph (sentences 22–27). Which sentence should be added after sentence 26?

• Likewise, orange juice became a necessity in the morning because of the benefits of vitamin C.

• Today people who are lactose intolerant are able to choose from other varieties of milk, such as soy, rice, almond, and coconut milk.

• Vitamin D occurs naturally in milk, but vitamin D can also be produced in the body through exposure to sunlight.

• Naturally the cereal manufacturers promoted milk because it tastes best with cereal.

Lyle wants to add the following idea to the sixth paragraph (sentences 28–33). The sandwich was just right for working people and schoolchildren: it was portable and you could eat it cold with your hands. Where is the most effective place to insert this idea?

• After sentence 28

• After sentence 29

• After sentence 31

• After sentence 33

Lyle needs a more effective conclusion to his essay. Which concluding sentence best replaces sentence 35 to accomplish this task?

• If this upward trend continues, we may expect four, five, or even six meals a day in the future.

• Now you know the curious history of how breakfast, lunch, and dinner mealtime traditions began.

• I’m glad breakfast was added since it’s my favorite meal of the day, and sometimes my family even eats cereal for dinner.

• However, for most of us, the habit of having three meals a day won’t be broken anytime soon.

An essay should have an introduction, body paragraphs that contain evidence and explanations, and a conclusion.

Match the following parts of a body paragraph.

• Intro to evidence with Evidence

• In the article Drinking Water by WHO it states, "Some 1 million people are estimated to die each year from diarrhea as a result of unsafe drinking-water."

• Topic sentence

• People should invest time and money into finding solutions to the water crisis because it will improve health.

• Transition/

  conclusion

• In addition to eliminating threats to health, clean and accessible water also allows for other benefits.

• Justification

• It is clear that having clean water that is easy to get can improve health by stopping water born disease.

• When you write an essay, each main idea usually gets its own separate ​ (a)   to make your writing clear and organized.

• paragraph
• telegraph
• autograph
• graffiti
• graphite

If you are feeling overwhelmed, the 3 most important parts to include in the essay are ​the ​ (a)   in the introduction, ​ (b)   in the body, and ​ (c)   in the conclusion.

• thesis
• evidence
• restate thesis
• hook
• final comment

Sweets are full of sugar; they can cause weight gain, tooth decay and heart disease. ​​ ​ (a)   , they are delicious and I still eat them.

• Nevertheless
• Indeed
• Consequently
• Therefore
• Accordingly