Revising Sentences for Clarity

13. Sentences 5–7 contain repeated information. What is the BEST way to revise these sentences? 

• A. Hedgehogs are awake at night and sleep during the day, so we covered Charlie’s cage to help him rest.

• B. Hedgehogs sleep in the day, and Charlie slept too so we covered his cage.

• C. Hedgehogs sleep, and Charlie sleeps, so he needs a covering.

• D. Hedgehogs are nocturnal, and nocturnal means awake at night and sleeping during the day.

14. What is the BEST way to revise sentences 4–6 to avoid repeating an idea? 

• A. Hedgehogs are nocturnal animals, which means they are awake at night and asleep during the day.

• B. Hedgehogs are nocturnal animals who are awake at night, and nocturnal animals sleep in the day.

• C. Hedgehogs are nocturnal. Nocturnal animals are awake at night. They sleep in the day. 
  

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  D. Hedgehogs sleep during the day and they sleep during the day because they are nocturnal. 

15. Which sentence should be removed from this paragraph? 

• sentence 1

• sentence 7

• sentence 8

• sentence 9

Tags

CCSS.RI.3.2

CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RI.5.2

CCSS.RL.3.2

CCSS.RL.4.2

16. Which is the BEST way to combine sentences 5 and 6? 

• A. That means they are awake at night and sleep during the day.

• B. That means they are awake at night and that also means they sleep during the day.

• C. That means they are awake at night they sleep during the day.

• D. That means they are awake at night, sleep during the day

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C

17. Maria wants to add a transition word to the beginning of sentence 15. Select the word that she should use. 

___________ we put in a little box he could hide in to get away from light or noise during the day. 

• Before

• Finally

• Because

• First

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.5.1A

18. Maria wants to combine sentences 23 and 24. In the space provided, write a new sentence that combines sentences 23 and 24 in a clear and effective way. 

Sentence 23: He was in the closet. 
Sentence 24: He was sleeping in his exercise ball! 

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.4.2C