Revision

Revision

Practice Questions

The Action Children’s Business Fair

(1) Rows of white tents cover a huge lawn at the Acton Children’s Business Fair in Austin, Texas. (2) Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare. (3) Since 2007, children aged 6 to 14 have been rewarded for their ideas and creativity at this fair. (4) It is a place where children can sell things they make to others. (5) The fair is fun, and it can also be profitable. (6) Jeff and Laura Sandefer worked with the Acton Academy to help start the first fair. (7) This event was small, but it was fun and successful. (8) The Sandefers invited neighborhood children to sell items they had made such as cupcakes and artwork. (9) The goal was to give children an opportunity to participate in the business world and to make money doing something they loved. (10) Children also enjoyed learning about business ownership. (11) Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair. (12) It still has the same goal. (13) Children are required to be in charge of all parts of their businesses. (14) The first requirement is that the children must make and sell their own products and services. (15) Most importantly, they have to fill out their own application form to be part of the fair. (16) They also have to set up their own booths. (17) Although parents may attend the fair, they are not allowed to help sell products or services. (18) In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers. (19) This rule helps children learn how to communicate with customers and make business decisions. (20) Because of this rule, children learn about running a business. 9 of 24 Set 1 Grade 4, Revising (21) One successful business at a recent fair was called “Slimy Hannah.” (22) At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself with no help from her parents. (23) Hannah worked hard to advertise her booth at the fair and on social media. (24) Hannah’s hard work paid off because she made more than $400 in 3 hours. (25) Over time the event has grown in popularity. (26) Now there are Acton Children’s Business Fairs in cities across the country. (27) The fairs give many children hands-on experience running a business. (28) For some young people, the fairs may even lead to a successful career. (29) The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow. 

Multiple Choice

Julie needs a more clearly stated central idea. Which sentence BEST replaces sentence 4 to improve the central idea of her paper?

• It is a place where anything can happen as long as the kids are excited about their ideas.

• It is a place where young people can sell things to other people who attend the fair.

• It is a place where parents can enjoy watching their children learn about business.

• It is a place where young people who run their own businesses can make money by selling their products or services.

Multiple Choice

Julie forgot to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 6–10). "The first fair was made up of a few tables in the Sandefers’ yard."

Where should this sentence be added?

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

• After sentence 10

Multiple Choice

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, so it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, but it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, or it still has the same goal.

Multiple Choice

Which transition BEST replaces Most importantly at the beginning of sentence 15?

• Instead

• In Addition

• In other words

• Finally

Multiple Choice

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 22?

• At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime, she had made it by herself with no help from her parents.

• At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself.

• With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made by herself at this booth.

• With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime at the booth that she made by herself.

Multiple Choice

Julie wants to use a more specific word than made in sentence 24. Which word BEST replaces this word?

• got

• had

• earned

• created

Multiple Choice

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 2?

• Excitedly, children talk inside the tents about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare.

• Children talk excitedly about topics inside the tents like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare.

• Inside the tents children talk excitedly about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare.

• Children talk inside the tents about topics like slime, magic tricks, and pet daycare excitedly.

Multiple Choice

Julie wants to use a more descriptive word than have in sentence 6. Which word should replace have in this sentence?

• start

• make

• invent

• produce

Multiple Choice

Which sentence should Julie add after sentence 17 to BEST support the ideas in the fourth paragraph (sentences 17–19).

• In fact, parents may not even answer questions from possible buyers.

• However, parents do enjoy watching their children spend time with their peers.

• But there are many other ways that parents can support their children at the fair.

• After all, a parent could charge a customer the wrong price for a product.

Multiple Choice

Which transition should be added to the beginning of sentence 25?

• Fortunately

• Then

• Certainly

• Now

Multiple Choice

Which sentence should Julie add after sentence 27 to improve the conclusion of her paper?

• Every year more children participate in the fair.

• The Acton Children’s Business Fair might lead to more products designed by children in stores.

• It is amazing what children can do when adults support them.

• The Acton Children’s Business Fairs help prepare the future business leaders of tomorrow.