An Unusual Animal- Editing and Revising

1. Lily wants to add a sentence to the end of her first paragraph (sentences 1-5). Which sentence could she add to clearly state the central idea of her paper?

• A. Madagascar is an island off the coast of Africa.

• B. Lemurs are furry creatures that might seem to be related to squirrels.

• C. Madagascar is the world's fourth largest island and about the size of Texas.

• D. Lemurs are among the most unusual animals found on Madagascar.

2. Lily wants to make sure she does not repeat information in her report. Which sentences does NOT belong in the introduction?

• A. Sentence 1

• B. Sentence 3

• C. Sentence 4

• D. Sentence 5

3. Lily would like to add the following sentence to the second paragraph. Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• A. At the beginning of the paragraph.

• B. After the sentence 6.

• C. At the end of the paragraph.

• D. This sentence should not be added to the paragraph.

4. What is the BEST way to combine sentences 10 and 11?

• A. Lemurs have large eyes that allow them to see in the dark.

• B. Lemurs have large eyes that their eyes allow them see in the dark.

• C. Lemurs have large eyes but they can see in the dark.

• D. Lemurs have large eyes, they can see in the dark.

5. What is the BEST way to combine sentences 14 and 15?

• A. Lemurs are great tree climbers, jumpers, too.

• B. Lemurs are great climbers and they are great tree jumpers.

• C. Lemurs are great tree climbers and jumpers.

• D. Lemurs are great climbers and lemurs are great jumpers.

6. Lily needs to add a transition word or phrase to help her readers move from sentence 18 to sentence 19. Which transition could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 19?

• A. Without a doubt,

• B. At first

• C. However

• D. After they jump,

7. Look at sentence 23. The phrase look around does not express what Lily was trying to say. Which word could BEST replace look around and help Lily improve the meaning of this sentence ?

• A. crawl

• B. beg

• C. hunt

• D. smell

8. Lily wants to stay focused and on topic. Which sentence does NOT belong in this report?

• A. Sentence 8

• B. Sentence 13

• C. Sentences 18

• D. Sentence 23