2016 Writing STAAR revise and edit pt 1

What is the BEST way for Brian to combine sentences 4 and 5?

• On that particular day, I had walked to the trails, hoping to find some rocks for a science project my friend Dillon was with me.

• On that particular day, my friend Dillon and I had walked to the trails, hoping to find some rocks for a science project.

• On that particular day, I had walked to the trails, and my friend Dillon was with me, and we were hoping to find some rocks for a science project.

• On that particular day, I had walked to the trails, hoping to find some rocks and my friend Dillon for a science project.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

CCSS.W.4.3C

CCSS.W.4.4

What is the best transition to be added to the beginning of sentence 8?

(6) We quickly got distracted while exploring the woods. (7) After a while we realized we were no longer on the marked path. (8) We had no idea where we were!

• In fact

• First

• Otherwise

• Before that

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CCSS.W.4.3C

What is the BEST revision to make in this sentence?

• I was also nervous, I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous, too also, but I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous, too, but I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous and was also worrying about poisonous snakes, too.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

CCSS.L.4.3A

CCSS.L.4.2C

Brian does not think the meaning of sentence 13 is clear. Which of the following changes would improve this sentence?

(12) The sun was about to set. (13) Once it did, the weather would drop quickly. (14) Then we would be in real trouble!

• Change Once to Because

• change weather to temperature

• change drop to happen

• change quickly to real fast

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CCSS.L.4.3A

CCSS.W.4.2D

Brian wants to add support to the idea he is expressing at the beginning of the fourth paragraph (sentence 15-19). Which sentence could BEST follow and support sentence 16?

(15) My heart started racing, and my palms began to sweat. (16) I had never felt this kind of fear before. (17) While Dillon rattled on and on, I tried to think of a solution. (18) Suddenly I remembered that for most of the hike, we had been walking beside a creek. (19) If we could make our way back to the creek, we could follow it out of the woods.

• I started to laugh and was soon doubled over on the ground.

• Because I was new to the area, I didn't know how far Dillon's house was from mine.

• After walking and walking, we were certain that we knew the way out.

• Being stranded in the woods on a cold night wasn't my idea of an adventure.

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CCSS.RL.4.1

CCSS.W.4.3A

CCSS.W.4.9A

Brian would like to add a sentence to the end of his paper to help make his conclusion stronger. What would be the BEST sentence for Brian to add?

(26) I definitely learned a lesson that day.

• Dillon sure knows his way around the trails.

• When people are afraid, they don't always make good choices.

• I'm going to listen a lot more closely to Mom's warnings in the future.

• I really did learn a very important lesson.

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CCSS.W.4.1D

CCSS.W.4.2E

CCSS.W.4.3E