Choosing Precise Words to Eliminate Wordiness and Redundancy

Choosing Precise Words to Eliminate Wordiness and Redundancy

Objective: I can eliminate wordiness and redundancy.

Open Ended

How can you make more meaningful word choices?

Multiple Choice

distinctive and clear

• imagery

• redundancy

• specific

• clarity

Multiple Choice

clearness

• imagery

• redundancy

• vivid

• clarity

Multiple Choice

exact and careful

• imagery

• redundancy

• vivid

• precise

Multiple Choice

full of life

• imagery

• redundancy

• vivid

• precise

Multiple Choice

unnecessary repetition

• imagery

• redundancy

• vivid

• precise

Multiple Choice

vivid language that appeals to the senses

• imagery

• redundancy

• vivid

• precise

Open Ended

Make this sentence clearer.

I bought a dog for the purpose of providing me with companionship.

Multiple Choice

Which word is an adverb?

• slowly

• pretty

• sticky

• funny

Multiple Choice

1. Which word is an adjective?

• kicking

• always

• pepper

• sweet

Multiple Choice

1. Which word is an adjective?

• kicking

• always

• pepper

• sweet

Poll

Is the following sentence wordy and/or redundant?

It is the desk that is uncomfortable.

• yes

• no

Multiple Choice

To be clearer in our writing, which way could we write the sentence?

It is the desk that is uncomfortable.

• The desk is uncomfortable.

• It is the desk that's uncomfortable.

• The desk that is the uncomfortable one.

Multiple Choice

Pick the sentence that avoids redundancy and wordiness.

• When Luther realized his mistake, his cheeks turned the same rosy red flush as his red T-shirt.

• When Luther realized his mistake, his cheeks flushed, turning the same color as his T-shirt.

• When Luther realized his embarrassing mistake, his cheeks began turning the same rosy color as his T-shirt.

• When Luther realized his mistake, his cheeks turned the same rosy red glow as his red T-shirt.

Multiple Choice

Read the sentence.

The gold yellow light of the sun made the lake shimmer.

Which part of the sentence is redundant?

• gold yellow

• light of the sun

• sun made

• lake shimmer

Multiple Choice

Read the sentence.

Tushan was a highly experienced runner with years of experience running in races.

What is the best replacement of “experience” in this sentence?

• skill

• exercise

• practice

• rehearsal

Multiple Choice

Read the sentences.

We spent the morning helping our friend Linda move out of her house. We moved each piece of furniture onto the front porch before moving it into the cargo van.

What word best replaces “moving” in the last sentence?

• pushing

• shoving

• loading

• throwing

Multiple Choice

Read the paragraph.

We didn’t enjoy our food when we went out to eat, but our friend Nelson said that the restaurant normally served some of the best Italian food in town. In fact, he said it was one of his favorite places to eat. He said that we should return and give it a second chance.

What word best replaces “said” in the last sentence?

• insisted

• announced

• exclaimed

• shouted