Revising/Editing - mammoths, Lincoln, crystals, and pets

Which sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 7–12) is extraneous and should be deleted from the essay?

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 12

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CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 10 and 11?

• Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled climbing out of the ravine in time surviving the sudden flooding.

• Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time, surviving the sudden flooding.

• Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time, and to survive the sudden flooding.

• Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time to survive the sudden flooding.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

Zendaya would like to add another detail in the fifth paragraph (sentences 20–24). The detail is: "Although the temperatures were only slightly different, the changes may have greatly affected rainfall, soil, and plant and animal growth, ultimately leading to the mammoths' death." Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 20

• After sentence 22

• After sentence 23

• After sentence 24

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.1

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

The pronoun in sentence 27 is unclear. Which word or phrase should replace "them" to create a more effective sentence?

• woolly mammoths

• other tourists

• teenagers

• Baylor students and scientists

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

Zendaya would like to add a concluding sentence to her essay that restates her thesis. Which sentence should she add at the end of her essay to accomplish this goal?

• The mystery of what happened to the woolly mammoths at Waco remains a total mystery to the researchers and everyone else.

• A complete skeleton of a woolly mammoth was recently discovered by a farmer in one of his fields in Michigan.

• Though there is no conclusive evidence, with continued research, scientists hope that one day they will know the specific cause of why the mammoths perished.

• Waco has many other interesting places to visit such as the campus of Baylor University, Magnolia Market, and the Cameron Park Zoo.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends and because the language and expressions would be simple they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, the language and expressions would be simpler and so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, simplifying the language and expressions so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends as the language and expressions were simplified by himself so that they could understand.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 12?

• As well as his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures, Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform for president his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills to help shape his platform for president.

• To help shape his platform for president, Lincoln as well as utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures and his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills for president.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Luka has included a redundant idea in the third paragraph (sentences 12–19). Which sentence should be deleted from the paragraph?

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 14

• Sentence 15

• Sentence 16

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

The word good is not the most effective word to use in sentence 31. Which word should replace good in the sentence?

• charming

• positive

• necessary

• appropriate

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What change, if any, is needed in sentence 8?

• Change Classified to classified

• Delete the comma after crystals

• Change translucent to transluscent

• No change is needed.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A