Writing Feedback (Tiger Parents)

Writing Homework Feedback

(Tiger Parents)

F5 2nd Sem, 2021​

By Mr Will

General feedback & the introduction

Questions:

Structure of the introduction

Multiple Choice

Introduction: Choose the best "background" sentence.

• It is believed that the "tiger parents" situation is very common in Chinese society.

• Not long ago, the phrase tiger parents popped up.

• Nowadays, many parents want their children win at the starting line.

• Over the last few years, the phrase "tiger parent" was such a trendy word in Asia, especially in China.

Multiple Choice

Introduction: Choose the best "context" sentence.

• Some parents use the wrong way although they want their children be good.

• This parenting style has benefited from the children's future life but drawbacks from the damage of their minds.

• Children's first teacher is their parents but being too harsh can also cause harm.

• Parenting style plays a vital role in the development of children's personality.

Multiple Choice

Introduction: Choose the best "thesis statement".

• Today, I'm going to explain this in two folds.

• This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of "tiger fathers / mothers".

• In this essay, I will discuss the positive and negative effects.

• This essay will discuss both the positive and negative impacts brought by this phenomenon.

Feedback: The body

Questions:

Topic sentences & Organization

Multiple Choice

Body 1: Choose the "bad topic sentence".

• Tiger parents will make their children do well in school and achieve high.

• One advantage of tiger parents is that children can learn a lot of things.

• The biggest advantage is that tiger parents will help cultivate good habits in their children.

• The benefit of having tiger parents is that children will be more disciplined.

Multiple Choice

Body 2: Choose the "bad topic sentence".

• On the other hand, tiger parents might harm children's mental health.

• On the downside, overly strict education can settle a child's creativity

• Studies already take up all available time including sleep and rest.

• On the countrary, tiger parents could cause their children to have rebellious thoughts and behaviours.

Poll

However, others reckon that tiger parents rarely care about whether their children are happy in life. They take their children more as a tool for comparison. Such parents impose their own outlooks on life and values on their children. Tiger parents always hope that children can make the fastest progress. They hope they can find their major earlier and be better than others, which will undoubtedly cause unnecessary pressure on children.

• Very good!

• There's a problem!

Feedback: The conclusion

Questions:

Is it a stance or not?

Multiple Choice

Conclusion: Which of the following DOES NOT SHOW the stance (立埸)?

• Although children are more disciplined in this way, it also hurts their hearts.

• To conlcude, if parents really want to be good to their children, they do not need to use such methods.

• Hence, parents must pay more attention to the child's psychological development.

• Parents should give some space for their children so that they can grow up healthily.

Feedback: Language

Multiple Choice

Some parents reckon that social competition is so fierce now ( ) we should be strict with children in time.

• ,

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Multiple Select

It means that the child's life is filled with stress. Because tiger parents will demand their children to behave well. (Choose 2 answers)

• , because

• because

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Open Ended

Type the English for the following:

1. 促進 2. 栽培 3. 發展 4. 阻礙 5. 出現 (不是appear)